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fairytale failure 10/5/07 . chapter 1I like this piece of writing. It seems a bit like a study, a very close observation of this boy. I especially love the line starting with 'He's just so enigmatic', the part about the mirror is really well done. You say 'to the souls of your feet'; maybe that was just an error (because we have soles, not souls in our feet) but if that was on purpose it was a really good play on words. You could make it more obvious by italicizing the word souls. Also, I think you could do a bit of editing so that it flows better. |
concerto49 9/1/07 . chapter 1Heya. Concerto. Yeah, in a way, it's hard to picture someone simply by words. We're humans, not objects. There's too much to be said and even saying is not enough. I guess you could call this your perspective of him, or at least a part of it. It is what you intended to show of what you thought of him. Yeah, now I'm confused too. Anyhow. |
amelodyofspring 9/1/07 . chapter 1wow thats really good. i would like to read more of your stuff. totally emo srz **born from heaven burns in hell |
Avalons Rebirth 9/1/07 . chapter 1Interesting. I don't know why, but I get the impression that you're writing about a little boy. (maybe 9 or 10) Are you? |