wow! aww...i loved it :) -its making me cry.

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omg! this poem really bringd back my personal meomories. thatnx for that..:)

wow! i loved all the poems your colection contained. your a boy right? are all those poems real? this one is my best. :)
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lovely~just like a statue of goddess~


p/s i'll take a break! more review coming up next time i come back! coz your poems are just irresistible !

what a contrast~~lovely one!

such simple words are used to describe such beautiful scene~~lovely~~

how sweet~my mind can imagine every single!!a very beautiful evening indeed~~

i truly feel you~~sometime what i want most from my love is just let me show how much i love her~"so just...let me" this line really give life to the whole poem~

Even if no other in this world knows us

I believe that deep down,

We know each other

Like stars together


I died, and was brought alive,and died again.
All because of your poems! they are just INSANE!lol...love your work~

arh this is so sweet! the line "As I miss you within every heartbeat of life" just killed me! i love almost all your poems in this collection, and i gotta say you did a VERY good job in writing poems that will touch me@everyone inner soul~~great one!

Kyox88, Malaysia.

Very different than your usual pieces in this collection. I like the change.

"My heart stilled,"... I didn't like that line only because you used it in another piece already. Seems less creative the second time around.

"The times I sweated,"...sweat

"I realized that you have seeded something in me."... I like the word seeded there, it's an interesting choice and it creates a nice image.

I also lie the repetition of just now, it works well. Nice piece, very relateable with a lot of emotion.

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I really like this, it's so sweet. I really like your descriptions of love, they are very true and relateable. I also like how you put complete on its own line, gives it a nice emphasis.

"When I use to hug her when she feels alone"... used to

I like the piece, it's an interesting situation you describe. I really like the contrasts between the you and the her, it illustrates the narrators emotions very well. I also like the title, it adds another feeling to the piece.

Didn't like the second to last line, it seemed a bit long. I also didn't get why you capitalized sun, that seemed odd. I did like the title, it worked well. I also liked the lines "Chancing fates,
/Scratching uncertainty,".. great description.

"The silence in everything we lived held dear."... I think you need a comma between lived and held or maybe the word and or the word or

"The curving emotions,"... I liked that line a lot, nice description.

I also like the random little bits of alliteration, it added to the piece nicely.