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| Kevdaddy 2007-09-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like the message. The rhymes do sound almost forced though. =) |
| J.L. Hastings 2007-09-07 ch 1,  | abuseThis gave me shivers! Seriously. I have long believed that the end is near (I know, how pessimistic of me) and this just made it all the more real to me. There's a small error in it though. In the third stanza, second to last line, you used 'there' when 'their' would have been more appropriate. (I know, picky and all that, but I can't help it. You should see me in my journalism class. I'm always yelling at the TEACHER for making small mistakes. XD) |
| Ariel of Wonderland 2007-09-01 ch 1, | abuseWow. This is good. I like how you presented it just like any other day, and then BOOM it's all over. Definitely a favourite. |
| Tranquil Thorns 2007-09-01 ch 1, | abuseAww how sad. D: I like the way you portrayed the end of the world in a realistic way, listing the things that lead up to it, and at the same time you put in your own twist and description. ...if anything I just said makes sense. >=P Kind of scary too, with volcanoes and mountains buckling. *shiver* |