FAB story Nat. truly intruiging characters and plotline. Well writte. ILOVEIT (:. Kim xx

O_O wow. that was intense. and now i can't wait for more... again! thanks for the update!

--kyra

I love your story. I can't wait for more.

haha lol. damn mothers are so annoying. please update soon i really want to know where this is going

Wow, the ending was PERFECT! I loved it so much! You NEED to keep going with this! Fabulous story! I love the characters, and the story is light and fluffy with just enough of a serious twist to make it interesting. Great job!

--kyra

Another great chapter! I love the game they're playing with each other, and the way he's totally and completely under her spell is amazing! Great job!

--kyra

Great story so far. Looking forward to the next chapter! Update SOON!

Oh, I like this! I've gotta go now (the bell just rang), but I will read the next chapter asap! great story, great characters, and i REALLY gotta go! lol

love it!
--kyra

Hey!
Okay, yes, I know I've read this all ready, BUT I'm at school and in my online class and quite frankly don't want to do Children's Lit. right now. Besides, your story is so much more interesting than that, lol... Anyways, I have to say I'm liking this edited version more than the first one. That isn't to say that the first wasn't good, because it was, this one just seems... Emm... more neat? It doesn't seem choppy at all, and the perspective changes more smoothly. I'm not sure if you know what I mean, but I know what I mean in my head, so, yeah... Great work... Anyways, I love this story. And the edited chapters are great. And I have to go now, school officals coming in and all... Keep writing!
Katie

Hm, I wonder what he means by the One?

Well this is quite an interesting story I like it. Thought I feel the chapters are a bit short. Other than that its good.

I can't wait to see what happens next. ^_^ Good work.

*Snow