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| Twilight Starr 2008-03-24 ch 1,  | abuseGood start. I like the chapter title. I'd suggest changing the overall title to something more catchy to attract readers. The title you have right now is, of course, okay. Just a suggestion. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Cullen P. 2007-12-31 ch 7, | abuseok this one was very good. i felt scared. the only problem was you never told me the time of day. so, i just assumed it was night time. other than that PERFECTION! |
| Coleer 2007-12-29 ch 7, | abusewow this is really good |
| ayameurahara1 2007-12-28 ch 3, | abuseI liked it. I think that you portrayed her emotions well in this chappie. Good job. Please keep it up. Ayame |
| ayameurahara1 2007-12-28 ch 2, | abuseI like it! I really want to find out who it is, and sorry for not keeping up with the story...I totally spaced. Very good, and it's not that girly, I mean, she has a boyfriend. What do you expect from the girl. Haha I'm babbling again. Keep it up. Ayame |
| My Brighter Darkness 2007-12-28 ch 1, | abuseYou're off to a nice start here. Could use a little more description, but this is just the first chapter. VERY promising for your first posted story. |
| PerhapsAlaska 2007-12-27 ch 1, | abuseI can only imagine how exciting this is going to get. I'm not usually big on suspense, but this sounds like it's gonna be pretty awesome. |
| Cullen P. 2007-12-27 ch 6, | abusei really liked this chapter. it's given me inspiration to try and write again. hm very thrilling. you could of made it more terrifying though. give him a weapon, a evil smile, and blood shot eyes and you have something. Maybe have him stalk her sneekily at night while she is in the woods. have him whisper things in her hear as she sleeps. stuff like that ya know? other than that i thought it was great. well c ya later RC. keep it up! |
| xx 3DD Fan 2007-12-25 ch 6, | abuseSuspense! I love it. I missed this story. I'll be looking forward to more! Happy New Year! |
| xx 3DD Fan 2007-10-16 ch 5, | abuseOhh we will finally figure out who the Non-Responder is (!)... in the next chapter. lol I can't wait! Once again, another great chapter! |
| Cullen P. 2007-10-15 ch 5, | abuseha i see u took my advice. great chapter rc. perfection! |
| xx 3DD Fan 2007-10-07 ch 4, | abuseOhh nice cliffhanger. Write more soon! |
| ayameurahara1 2007-09-23 ch 1, | abuseCool intro. |
| Cullen P. 2007-09-23 ch 3, | abuseo my gosh rc! i loved this chapter the most! your amazing! o and how is the sreenplay writing for dummies book. hopefully it will help u more than it helped me. bravo! |
| xx 3DD Fan 2007-09-23 ch 3, | abuseWow, this is really good so far! I love the plot and it's definitely creepy (especially the end part of this chapter). You need to write more!! |