 eamane tinuviel 2008-08-09 . chapter 1I love how you portrayed Ophelia as this innocent being that later becomes a broken soul. Your choice of words is quite interesting, but it works for your piece.
I especially liked this line: "lips turned into ice
with blood stained frostbites" The image was just haunting.
I'm just curious though. Why did you choose the name Ophelia? Were you referring to the Ophelia in Shakespeare's play Hamlet? Because your poem kind of describes that Ophelia.
Awesome job, overall ^_^ |
 Definition 2007-09-17 . chapter 1Thought-provoking :o
You don't see much of this kind of writing style. Love the "blood stained frostbites" and "staying forever in an innocent shell". Beautiful, strong images. |
 Kusje 2007-09-03 . chapter 1So, I'm favoriting this, right? Haha, I am :)
Very interesting concept you have going on here, and I love the title, by the way.
It's interesting how using no caps in a poem can really set the mood; that's what I like about this one of yours.
Good job! |
 xfail 2007-09-02 . chapter 1This is a very interesting poem. I had to read it twice before I felt ready to review it, and that is always a good sign for me. I love poetry that makes me wonder, like this. Your imagery and metaphors are dead-on and very vivid; the formatting you chose to use in certain lines interested me, as did the irregularity of your lines. Overall, it has a haunting and beautiful effect. Good job. |
 tearing hands 2007-09-02 . chapter 1I love "blood stained frostbites." Beautiful and kind of creepy at the end. |
 Hip Like Badass 2007-09-01 . chapter 1Oh, wow. I love it.
"staying forever in an innocent shell
yet inside, you turn into a seductress"
--In any other poem, these lines would be fine, but in this one they stick out as being not-as-good-as-the-rest. A little bit clumsy, I guess? Or maybe not, I'm generally not that big on poetry, maybe I don't know what I'm talking about.
But an unequivocal BIG BIG applause for the rest of it, anyway. |
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