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| Definition 2007-09-17 ch 1,  | abuseThought-provoking :o You don't see much of this kind of writing style. Love the "blood stained frostbites" and "staying forever in an innocent shell". Beautiful, strong images. |
| Kusje 2007-09-03 ch 1, | abuseSo, I'm favoriting this, right? Haha, I am :) Very interesting concept you have going on here, and I love the title, by the way. It's interesting how using no caps in a poem can really set the mood; that's what I like about this one of yours. Good job! |
| xfail 2007-09-02 ch 1, | abuseThis is a very interesting poem. I had to read it twice before I felt ready to review it, and that is always a good sign for me. I love poetry that makes me wonder, like this. Your imagery and metaphors are dead-on and very vivid; the formatting you chose to use in certain lines interested me, as did the irregularity of your lines. Overall, it has a haunting and beautiful effect. Good job. |
| tearing hands 2007-09-02 ch 1, | abuseI love "blood stained frostbites." Beautiful and kind of creepy at the end. |
| Hip Like Badass 2007-09-01 ch 1, | abuseOh, wow. I love it. "staying forever in an innocent shell yet inside, you turn into a seductress" --In any other poem, these lines would be fine, but in this one they stick out as being not-as-good-as-the-rest. A little bit clumsy, I guess? Or maybe not, I'm generally not that big on poetry, maybe I don't know what I'm talking about. But an unequivocal BIG BIG applause for the rest of it, anyway. |