 Ashelin 2007-09-02 . chapter 1Oh how sad. But that doesn't seem to be the right word. More like...bitter soulless questioning ripping out my soul. Ok, a little dramatic, but I felt this poem. Great job. |
 ilovebooksandmusic 2007-09-02 . chapter 1Wow wonderful work. I loved the 'tears tattooed' lines. So sad yet amazing. I loved it, keep up the great work. |
 Helpless-Dreamer01 2007-09-02 . chapter 1We all see the two different girls. The empty one and the one which is so dispicably happy. But maybe it is the other in which is dispicable...?
Nice contrasting, and the realisation at the end... Well Done. I commend you
Dani |
 Nemonus 2007-09-01 . chapter 1Not bad. I like the "tatooed tears" and the line breaks. The middle stanza gets a bit too angsty, and it's confusing as to whether there are three characters (the tatooed one, the happy "other face", and "not me. Her", who is the narrator/tatooed one in denial) or two, the sad tatooed one and the her alter ego the happy, in-denial "other face". Your words are pretty good and I like the effects such as perenthesis and dashes. |
 Princess-anna57 2007-09-01 . chapter 1Oh my goodness, wow. This is very emotional and extremely well written. I must applaud you. It's so sad though. Do write on.
~Anna~ ^_^ |
 a silenced revolution 2007-09-01 . chapter 1Intense and sad. Nice. Not nice-happy of course, but good job. |