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| Haru-chan 2008-06-19 ch 16,  | abuseI keep missing chapters in pairs. Sou nee. . .anyway, great story. I shall return for the next update. . .or two. haha keep it up! |
| under the bed 2008-06-03 ch 15, | abuseLol your grammar is a little messed up. =] "A short" should actually be in plural form, so it becomes "shorts". |
| shiraz 2008-05-05 ch 13, | abusethis is a grat story cant wait for the next chapter! XoXo shiraz |
| Haru-chan 2008-05-03 ch 14, | abusenice. i can't wait for the new chapter! |
| Yas 'Yz' Shah 2008-04-29 ch 14, | abuseSuspense! I wonder who is the person that called Ami's name. (Wonders)I can't wait for the next update. In this chapter, I don't see much grammar errors. The way you present Ami's point of view is amazing. It's like as if it's really like... a story in a girl's mind. (Sorry if my sentence sounds so crappy -_-) I'll be waiting for the next update. :D - Sayonara |
| Colonel 2008-04-29 ch 4, anon. | abuseThe difference between house and home is this: A house is a specific type of place to live in, it's the actual building, with the kitchen, bath, and bedroom, you know etc. An apartment is NOT a house, but it is a home. A home is any place someone lives and is comfortable at. |
| Lai Anderson 2008-04-29 ch 14, | abuseGreat chapter! I loved how your lines flowed naturally all throughout. You're becoming so much better of a writer, hurray! And I'm really flattered that you even had to mention me in your author's note. Don't worry about it, we all have our hectic schedules to take care of. I'm just glad that my new story got you interested. Thanks for that. |
| under the bed 2008-04-28 ch 14, | abuseRandom castle trivia at the end there. =] |
| japanera 2008-04-02 ch 11, anon. | abuse,.this chapter seem fast,.??hehe god! i thought toru and ami are gonna get busted,.goo thing toru did that,.poor yuki,.!!hahaha i really hate pipol like that,.hehehe keep writing ,.your very promising ,.i really salute you,..i reall do,. |
| japanera 2008-04-02 ch 10, anon. | abuse,.yihee,..it's really funny knowing that ami is finding a way to get yusuke and miku 2geder,..the other two is also funny the way they act in front of each other,.by the way that yuki is a real bi*tch,.hmm anyways,.iwould never ever dislike your story,.im just really kind of busy..anyways just always update,..love yah,.!! |
| Haru-chan 2008-04-01 ch 13, | abuseaugh!cliffy. i had no idea Miku could be so scary. . .Some errorsin here though. be careful of your tenses and plurals. If those get messed up the tory is really hard to follow. any how, update soon! |
| under the bed 2008-03-30 ch 13, | abuseawesomeness =] |
| japanera 2008-03-28 ch 9, anon. | abuse,.OMG,.so its true that you really brought back the girl that cause satorou to be like that,.im soo hapi,.*hugging the author*,. i really didnt think that you will do it,.gosh,.haha i cant describe the feeling im feeliung right now,..anyway thanks,..! |
| mc-12 2008-03-27 ch 3, anon. | abusewow. |
| japanera 2008-03-27 ch 12, anon. | abuse,.hey im kinda glad that wei i opened fictionpress i saw ur story,...but suddenly wen i luk at the chaters i kinda felt shocked,.bcoz i didnt know dat uve been continue writing gosh it was so stuid ofme,.i mean how come i mean i didnt know i felt kinda sad,.but stll im hapy to see it your story is really fast imroving as usual i love it,.just continue working nxt tym if i have a lot of time i see to t dat i wud make a better review,..gambatte |