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| His Mercy's Waiting 2007-09-16 ch 1,  | abuseI like it. It's so simple and sweet. But I think you could've used less punctuation in the first few lines. "I can't help but saying thank you" --> I think it's supposed to be "I can't help but say thank you". Wonderful write. Rock on. :) |
| heidimp2006 2007-09-03 ch 1, | abuseoh jillie! i love it!! you haven't written something new in a while and i'm really glad you wrote this one! you know that you can talk to me anytime. there is so much emotion in this poem and i think that really shows your true colors!! i heart you!! |
| The Postscript 2007-09-02 ch 1, | abuseWonderful write. This reminds me of Jane Eyre and the end, especially, when Rochester becomes blind and, through that disability, finally becomes in a sense equal with Jane. The "You're my angel, my fire, my sight." and "Without you I'm deaf, dumb, and blind." are lines that really reminded me of this. I like the honesty and simplicity in this and the development of the poem. Great work. Keep writing, k. |