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Reviews For: Wistful Dreams

Beluga1 2008-04-27 ch 1,	abusewow, ur rlly good. u seem to like the ocean, by the way, i also start things and never seem to finish them
Thenardier 2007-09-15 ch 4,	abuseI loved this immensely. I felt as though my emotions were taken for a rollercoaster ride, feeling hopeful and happy at the onset of the journey, to the trepidation at the 'vacant cold', and in the end, everything turned out to be perfect. The last 4 lines were very elegantly done, a perfect way to end the poem. I especially loved the words 'flowered with deceit'. Wonderful usage. I love all four poems immensely. You have justified my reason for temporarily breaking my hiatus. It was worth reading these. It's a pity I don't have the time to read your other new works, or your old works as I promised, and that I can't write anything new as a way of repaying all the people whose great works I read today, including you though perhaps I could fascinate you with my older works? Heh. Anyways I can't wait for my examinations to be over so I can really devote more time to reading all your works. I truly admire your style. Cheers!
Thenardier 2007-09-15 ch 3,	abuseThis is brilliant. I love the general iambic pentemeter structure you adopted. It flowed beautifully. The title really is very apt, and once again, it feels so real, like a damsel is really saying those words to me. It's so geniune. Loved it! One more to go!
Thenardier 2007-09-15 ch 2,	abuseThis piece is so heartwrenching. I love it so much. Each line is beautifully crafted. They rhythmn, the meter, the syllable count and rhyme, they were impeccable. I love that it is short. Makes it ever more succinct and poignant. Can't wait for the other two!
Thenardier 2007-09-15 ch 1,	abuseEnraptured. That was what I was. Every single line sang out to me. I felt that I really were experiencing every line. Then, when the poem, I had to face the horrible reality of me being stuck in my room. So for that, bad poem! Haha, just kidding. This is seriously a fantastic poem, and this is going to my faves. Can't wait to read the rest of the poems in this series.
EternallyImperfect 2007-09-08 ch 4,	abuseI read them all and they're all very, very nice. They have a good sense of rhythm and flow and the ryhme isn't awkward. Besides that, the imagery is wonderful. Keep it up!
Justgale 2007-09-08 ch 1,	abuseI really liked this. It is the kind of thing that I could use as a jumping off place to come up with some new twist or extention on the idea and write something totally diffrent from what you did. In fact as I reread it I can see a story starting to take shape. Thank you for the insperation.
Ramenluver 2007-09-08 ch 4,	abuseWow...I was listening to "Now We Are Free" by Lisa Gerrard and reading this, and it made it all the more sweeter. Lovely, dear. -Ramen
Paper Demon 2007-09-08 ch 1,	abuseWell-written, the imagery of this poem reminds me of going on a sea voyage, a peaceful vacation away from all of life's worries.
Jeanie Gordon 2007-09-03 ch 3,	abuseThis reminds me a lot of me and my boyfriend. :) We always make up fairy tales to put eachother to bed at night.
Jeanie Gordon 2007-09-03 ch 2,	abuse"Garnish me in tales of old" is a really cool sentence/idea. It's stuff like that that I wish I coudl come up with in my writing. I envy you more than you'll ever know.
Jeanie Gordon 2007-09-03 ch 1,	abuseI like the first poem a lot. It would make a cool extended scene. If you turned each line into a paragraph or something, it would make a rockin' start to a book. ;)
Ramenluver 2007-09-02 ch 3,	abuseRamenluver: drools all over he keyboard The only thing I could suggest is that you change 'me' in the first line to 'my'. Otherwise, pretty spiffy. -Ramen
Ramenluver 2007-09-02 ch 2,	abuseShort, but enchanting. Lovely, darling. -Ramen
Ramenluver 2007-09-02 ch 1,	abuseThis poem had some points where the rhyming broke, but I'm fine like that. I guess it's better than the rhyming sounding forced. -Ramen

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