I love the rant-like style of this poem. The words all seem very clear and distinct, but they run together into something larger and intriguing, like a poetic fever. If that makes sense. Great job.

The flow you used for this piece really worked nicely. The emotion is so strong its like you can cut it with a knife. Very genuine. Nicely done!

It was weird but...good. Very river-like flow. Good job!

-C.N

The poem flowed really well, I loved the rhythm. My favorite lines were "take my hate and desire and / set it on fire." The beginning and the ending are perfect, especially the ending.

Very very good, I love the first line, "i’m drowning in your faithlessness"

When I was reading this I got the strangest feeling of deja vu

I don't know, it was weird.

Anyway, great poem.

-theatrical rhapsodies