Somehow you've managed to keep great characterization and plot lines while still making me laugh like an idiot every five seconds.

This is really good! Milly's got a real personality, and it's really an interesting plot and setting so far.

This review would be longer but I can't wait to read more chapters.

This engaged my attention the entire time. You really slipped into character, which I love. Too many people struggle to truly find their character, but you managed beautifully.

I hope you do not mind, I would like to add it to my community.

Thanks,
R.

Have to agree with the ooc bit. Twas a tad extreme.

I disagree. It's in the supernatural genre, so the believability in the "would this happen in real life" respect's thrown out the window. What does matter is how real the characters are and their response to learning about the supernatural. So far, Mildred is someone who's fun to read and completely believable. You have her voice down really well, too. I especially loved how she peaked a look at that note and then felt guilty for thinking bad things about Vronsky.

I'm really interested to see where this goes.

Great start here. And I love the summary you chose for the story - it really caught my eye.

Ominous scab beacon. Yep, that's going to be my new insult from now on. For example, if someone goes around saying this story is terrible I'll be like "No it isn't you stupid scab beacon". Genius.

Nice touch of rain in this chapter. 'A fine use of pathetic fallacy' I would say if I enjoyed the subject of English. In all honesty I'm going to have to take lessons from your writing structure and incorporate it into my own stories. Easy to follow and entertaining. I was hoping that, after my long absence, there would be more updates, but beggars can't be choosers I suppose...that's a lot of dots.

And the next chappy is looking promising. People dressed up as animals at parties tend to go down very well. My friends and I turned up at an 18th dressed as furry woodland creatures; I was a squirrel and squirrels get all the chicks. Fact.

AH I'm charmed by this story, by a whole lot actually! The humor is just downright funny, very endearing. The characters are well characterized, and of course, I love the whole concept. I can't wait for the next chapter!

I'm anxious to see if Sydney will see his girlfriend, and how Milly would handle that. I think she so likes him! haha

wow! I finally had the chance to give this a read, and I'm delighted! A very interesting first chapter :D

PIGGY BACK RIDE!

Della, darling, you had me rolling all over the floor with that one. And Sydney had a motorcycle? Ignoring the fact that he was a crappy driver, that's pretty badass!

Damn, pretty much everything you write is oozing with witty goodness. ZOMPIRE INDEED!

haha. the notFunky thing still cracks me up. this is genius. mil reminds me a lot of Zooey Deschanel. she's fantastic! don't have time to read the rest right now, but believe me, it will be read!

YAY~
This was a damn good chapter! I had been waiting for this little exchange, the Zompire one. Though I still want to give Mil a sandwich, and have her not feel guilty about it.

I loff you~!

I have so much love for this story.

The interaction between Mildred and Sydney is so great.

I absolutely adore you.

And everything is revealed! Well, not everything, but more than we knew before. I like this story's weirdness, it's perfect. I'm wondering when Sydney's old girlfriend is going to start creating issues, that'll be interesting.

And Sydney's going to a rave dressed as the Easter Bunny? That promises to be very entertaining. I love how funny everyone in this is, they remind me of how random I am. So an update will be much appreciated, cause I can't wait for more Sydney and Mil!

ZOMGROFLMAOBBQ~!
Or...er... yeah.
This chapter makes my heart sing! It makes everything... Okay, let's not go down that road. Anyway, I freakin' loved this. I beyond loved this. I say love when I eat pizza pockets or get a movie for Christmas. I like, REALLY LOVE THIS. YEAH.

“P.T.,” I growled, menacingly.

“What?!” Sydney spun around and growled at me.

“Oh, wait,” I singed, “They’re in my back pocket.”

Oh my God, I laughed so hard when I read that line. That was amazing. And good twists in this chapter too! Yay!