this is really sweet. very nice! D

This makes me cry gracie

But I love it

that woz totally auwsome! keep up the good work!

I like the idea of someone unwittingly seducing (wow, that sounds way too sexual for this poem) the character. Also, the way the person stumbles, and then the other person does, too, blends the characters together and makes them seem more compatable, which deepens the poem a little bit. A short little suggestion- you use the same word in two lines right after the other, twice. Fell in the fifth and sixth and the your in the last lines are a little repetitive, so try and keep that in mind.

michelle

aww this is so beautiful _

summerdazed

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