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For What Its Worth 2008-05-13 ch 9,	abuseVery nice! You even managed to answer all of my questions! So how long is it going to take the police to show up at Allen's house? Though it is rather remote, is it not? I suppose there aren't many people around to have heard any commotions...Does the darkness teach its protectors, or do they somehow have an innate knowledge they must merely discover? Very mysterious. I can't believe you left out Heather's fight. You CAN switch POVs for just a little bit! :( Or are you trying to keep one POV per chapter and the next one will be hers? eyes light up hopefully I shall await the next chapter with bated breath. :)
For What Its Worth 2008-05-05 ch 8,	abuseThere are a few slightly puzzling mistakes. "Both of us verily had anytime.." Did you mean 'barely' or did you really mean verily? "Before we knew it, both of us sensed her above us." This is one is kind of funny. Is it before they knew it, or did they know it? "...Heather just hit the grounds..." 'Grounds' as in the apartment grounds? Even if she bled to death, the unnamed Protector died rather quickly. I thought bleeding out was a painful and protracted affair. I'm interested in how Heather and Dark are going to stay out of jail this time. They are suspected in another death, the hole in the apartment building is quite obviously exposing Dark's apartment, they must have left DNA at the scene, and as I mentioned before, the police already have it out for them. Oh, and wasn't Allen off with family for Christmas? Hmm...Maybe they were in danger because of him so he fled...
For What Its Worth 2008-03-13 ch 7,	abuseHmm...was this in the romance genre? Ah, well. It seems a bit...incomplete. You have one character describing his life and occasionally having a conversation with one person. It would be nice to see things from another POV, or to have more characters, or if you just changes your writing style a tad. All in all, the story is good, despite its resemblance to Bleach, but it seems a bit boring at present.
For What Its Worth 2007-09-13 ch 4,	abuseHehehe...Taunting detectives. Not necessarily wise, but not exactly dangerous, either. Considering many prominent facts. So when does Heather catch on? Surely she must. After all, the darkness IS his favorite realm. For a good cause, I like it too! This is an awesome story. :D
For What Its Worth 2007-09-11 ch 3,	abuseSo why doesn't this happen to any other Protectors? Is there an easy way to make this disappear? Also, you are rather fond of thinking our memories faulty, aren't you? ;P Nice start on the friends.
For What Its Worth 2007-09-08 ch 2,	abuseInteresting... So what about the college? And any other friends, family, etc. of the two? I am sure their lives do not revolve around college? Just a thought... I do know we are only two chapters in.
For What Its Worth 2007-09-05 ch 1,	abuseHow intriguing. So are there more protectors? I find there usually are in stories that include college. lol, very much as if colleges attract groups. Update soon!

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