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| Delirium Batharie 2007-09-05 ch 1,  | abuseI think it's good you didn't stop after the first stanza. This is beautifully haunting, but in a really raw mysterious way...it's like a bit of something that's flaked off a bigger whole, but you only need to see the tiny flake to know what the whole is. Or something. Anyway, great job on this! |
| she smolders 2007-09-04 ch 1, | abuseI must sat that I love the sound of that one line: "of her (consensual thievery)," there's so many double meanings to that and it makes it almost beautiful, almost frghtening. The last stanza is more then a little bittersweet too. Take care and keep writing. |