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| simpleplan13 2007-11-02 ch 1,  | abuseI like the format a lot and the seasons stanza is great.. I also like the last stanza... "forgive..not forget" was a great line |
| Twister1352 2007-10-17 ch 1, anon. | abuse:) like I said earlier looks professional to me :D I like the way you described the seasons 2 ether way, powerful poem :D I like it |
| Princess-anna57 2007-10-10 ch 1, | abuseOh very nicely done. ::) Great! Write on. ~Anna~ ^_^ |
| Ramza the Heretic 2007-10-09 ch 1, | abuseThis poem has a most singular form but it's somewhat well-written especially "spring skies to summer sorrow autumn tears like rain," Quite a commendable job there. |
| Aquafied 2007-10-07 ch 1, | abusespring skies to summer sorrow autumn tears like rain, -the autumn doesnt cry here. |
| review 2007-09-26 ch 1, | abusewow. really full of emotion. good stanza organization...but thats just the mechanics. its really moving, this poem. |
| Kissing Concrete 2007-09-17 ch 1, | abusethis is so sad, but beautifully written. at first it bothered me a little that there was no capitalization, but by the time i was finished, i thought it added to the whole theme of the poem. very well written. i like your use of the "forgive and forget" theme as well as using seasons. keep writing! |
| Charity F 2007-09-14 ch 1, | abuseSimply gorgeous. Minimal. Beautiful. You really should publish these. Your writing is something special. |
| The Postscript 2007-09-06 ch 1, | abuseAstounding. Great job with the alliteration - it adds nicely without being too overbearing. Good writing usually is centered around a development, change, or growth of some kind and it's also nice how you use the seaons to incorporate and aid that a little bit. Also, nice job being sensitive to spacing (e.g. the hyphen in careless and spacing - or lack of - in forgive and forget). All of these techniques are little pointers that help the reader clarify your thoughts and ultimately his own. Keep writing, k. |
| Davi 2007-09-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like how you used the seasons in it. :3 |
| jojoba-music-girl 2007-09-05 ch 1, | abuseI could feel the sadness while reading this. It's so well written! Keep it up! |
| perpetual questions 2007-09-04 ch 1, | abuseI love how you mix beautiful wording and personal and interpersonal content together. It creates a powerful and intriguing combination. Really great work. |