 simpleplan13 2007-11-02 . chapter 1I like the format a lot and the seasons stanza is great.. I also like the last stanza... "forgive..not forget" was a great line |
 Twister1352 2007-10-17 . chapter 1 :) like I said earlier looks professional to me :D
I like the way you described the seasons 2
ether way, powerful poem :D I like it |
 Princess-anna57 2007-10-10 . chapter 1Oh very nicely done. ::) Great! Write on.
~Anna~ ^_^ |
 Serious Sonneteer 2007-10-09 . chapter 1This poem has a most singular form but it's somewhat well-written especially "spring skies to
summer sorrow
autumn tears like rain,"
Quite a commendable job there. |
 Aquafied 2007-10-07 . chapter 1spring skies to
summer sorrow
autumn tears like rain,
-the autumn doesnt cry here. |
 review 2007-09-26 . chapter 1wow. really full of emotion. good stanza organization...but thats just the mechanics.
its really moving, this poem. |
 Kissing Concrete 2007-09-17 . chapter 1this is so sad, but beautifully written. at first it bothered me a little that there was no capitalization, but by the time i was finished, i thought it added to the whole theme of the poem. very well written. i like your use of the "forgive and forget" theme as well as using seasons. keep writing! |
 Charity F 2007-09-14 . chapter 1Simply gorgeous.
Minimal.
Beautiful. You really should publish these. Your writing is something special. |
 The Postscript 2007-09-06 . chapter 1Astounding. Great job with the alliteration - it adds nicely without being too overbearing. Good writing usually is centered around a development, change, or growth of some kind and it's also nice how you use the seaons to incorporate and aid that a little bit. Also, nice job being sensitive to spacing (e.g. the hyphen in careless and spacing - or lack of - in forgive and forget). All of these techniques are little pointers that help the reader clarify your thoughts and ultimately his own. Keep writing, k. |
 Davi 2007-09-05 . chapter 1 I like how you used the seasons in it. :3 |
 jojoba-music-girl 2007-09-05 . chapter 1I could feel the sadness while reading this. It's so well written! Keep it up! |
 a silenced revolution 2007-09-04 . chapter 1I love how you mix beautiful wording and personal and interpersonal content together. It creates a powerful and intriguing combination. Really great work. |