Reviews for Challenge Twenty Eight

Reviews For: Challenge Twenty Eight - Reviews: Page 1 of 3

Washi Chiisai 2007-10-28 ch 1,	abuseMechanics: Macky Originality: Henred5 Overall: BlackCat Was interested through this roumd :) Great job!
Catseye*Rose 2007-10-01 ch 1,	abuseMechanics: Dark Originality: Macky Best: Macky Interesting bunch this round.
Catseye*Rose 2007-10-01 ch 7,	abuseThis was really original. I liked it a lot.
Catseye*Rose 2007-10-01 ch 8,	abuseThis was cute, and it was fun to read. It could have used some more detail, and I didn't really understand the addition of so many new characters at the end, but I still liked it.
Catseye*Rose 2007-10-01 ch 6,	abuseI liked this :P Original and interesting. Only a couple spelling errors, but nothing to detract from the story. A bit more background on the commission would have been good, but it still worked.
Catseye*Rose 2007-10-01 ch 5,	abuseNot as confusing as the last one, but it could still use a bit of background story. A couple grammar errors, but it was still well-written.
Catseye*Rose 2007-10-01 ch 4,	abuseReally original idea! What is an ocarina, anyway? Playing music on a potato sounds fun...
Catseye*Rose 2007-10-01 ch 3,	abuseI bet he sees Alice's eyes! Anyway :P I liked this. Have you ever read "After Hamelin"? Really good book. So, I liked the story and the idea of the crocodiles. In some bits, the grammar needs some work, and the structure is a bit sketchy sometimes, but overall, I greatly enjoyed it.
Catseye*Rose 2007-10-01 ch 2,	abuseDefinitely bloody! It reminded me of the Anita Blake and Merry Gentry books all rolled into one :P I liked it.
mindreader208 2007-09-30 ch 1,	abuse—Mechanics— Dark —Originality— BlackCat —Best— Dark
henred5 2007-09-28 ch 1,	abuse—Mechanics: BlackCat —Originality: Macky —Best: Chiomi Welp thats my votes in.
henred5 2007-09-28 ch 9,	abuseAww...such cuteness...especially the end. lols
henred5 2007-09-28 ch 8,	abuseI agree, at least you gave it a shot, "its better to try then to not try at all." It was a pretty cute short story; I loved the description of the violin - sounds beautiful. The title was pretty neat in itself, I almost thought this story would be about a character have his/her life spiral completely out of control. Loved the story about the crocodile chasing Gwen - lol There were a few typos, like the forgotten accent on the e in fiancée. Other then that cute, short and fluffy, not too bad at all.
henred5 2007-09-28 ch 7,	abuseIt reminds me of The lion, The Witch And The Wardrobe, obviously because of the whole 'travelling into a different place/world through a wardrobe.' So you have taken that element but changed it. The story takes place in completely different surroundings, with different characters, and a different way of getting into the grand sounding land, the wardrobe itself isn't magic, but the handle is. Very original, bravo! On the grammar/spelling issues, I'm not entirely sure about the use of a capital A in 'And would the attorney...' There aren't many typos/spelling errors here - which is great. Honestly, I think this would make a great story for you to write. It's brilliant how it was ended with a question mark, a question left for the reader to wonder about.
Shard-Elyss 2007-09-27 ch 1,	abuseAfter having read every entry (total sum of 8)for this challenge, I would have to pick Mechanics - Blackcat (Because there weren't so many grammar and spelling mistakes as there were in the others. Simple spell checker would have caught those mistakes guys.) Best - Dark - I felt that everything stayed together and was delivered as uniform whole in the delivering of this reply to the challenge given. Originality - Macky - My reason is because I liked the idea of a slave being inherited while said slave was cool, gallant and easy going about it.

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