aw that is wonderful! ;) very creative too.
though in my opinion, we asian people rock :)
anie.

Oh I like this... You should keep writing it. Asian people rock though... Well I guess that's just my opinion seeing as I'm Asian, but whatever... So yeah, keep writing and I'll keep reviewing you --Marie Jane

it seams...entertaining, i would read it.

Hm...well this chapter confused me a bit because I don't know the song, but the summary sounds really interesting!

*is dying of laughter*

By the way I can never figure out who you are because you're name is always chaning (yes I'm a hypocrite, I know)

Anyway. Write it.

This reads like a poem. Which is a good thing, if you didn't know, because that means that it flows very smoothly. Of course since it's a trailer, I guess it shouldn't be reading like a poem, but too bad, it does, and I like it.

“'Oh yes. It’s definatly fair.'”

I'll assume you can see the typo there.

"Show’s Riley flipping off a pretty Asian girl, her middle finger raised high in the air."

Who's flipping of who here?

"… the only thing that can mend a broken heart are trashy romance novels…"

Watch your verb agreement. "Thing" needs to be "things" or "are" needs to be "is"; obviously the "is" would sound awkward in that particular sentence, but remember that you need to agree the verb with the noun to which it primarily pertains.

Also. I noticed you switch between showing the action in italics ("Shows Riley eating her hat…") and having action that is in normal print ("The girl runs up to the boy, who turns on her, glaring."). Consistency is important, and I know formatting doesn't count for too much, but try to stick with one throughout.

And that's my commentary. Keep writing, of course (because I know I haven't).

I love it! And I love the whole movie trailer idea too! Mind if I use it?

JW

Interesting ideas, your "trailer" leaves me wanting to read more. Please write more, I promise to R&R it.

It’s the hat that got me and the hat that’ll keep me stuck here. Take the hat out if you want, I’ll just imagine it’s there and mention it in every single review. Yes, that was my sneaky way of saying I’ll read more when you post more.