OH my god. Its really really really good. the idea's a little cliche, but the sadness really got to me. You rock girl!

omg this is real sad...

That's a good song and I like the idea you have for this. But one thing...about posting lines of lyrics between text, especially in bold, kind of takes away from the writing. While I was reading it I found my eyes kept glancing at it and I ended up skipping parts of the actual story. Then I had to go back and read what I missed. But besides that, this was pretty good I enjoyed reading it.