 Teary-Eyed-Child 2007-10-01 . chapter 1 This is an extremely touching poem; I believe that it is so because you have placed so much honesty into it.
As I was reading, I had a mental image of a hand flying across paper, with a pen in hand, not taking a moment to think about the words expressed. It was as if you simply allowed your heart to speak words you had yet to express.
Wonderful job; it was a powerful and moving poem that I doubt I will forget in the near future. |
 Taltush/MeiMei 2007-09-05 . chapter 1First, a small correction: "Let's" not "lets". Next, I think that punctuation would make this flow much better and significantly easier to read. Also, it's a tad bit repetitive, but that I understand. It's an incredibly intense poem and that made me feel strongly with "I". Even parts I didn't like as much still touched me. It's powerful, honest, and very touching. Overall, a very good poem. |