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| Keloiu 2008-07-08 ch 8,  | abuseAwesome chapter...can't wait for more as usual! |
| hellomoto 2008-06-06 ch 8, | abuseplease keep updatin gwhen is she going to tell that she was raped? |
| Angel-Leigh Jones 2008-06-03 ch 3, | abusehiya wow i was not expecting that. i guessed she was pregnant but not that it was henrys child. i thought she could have been raped by some one. Wow great job you kepted me guessing. angel |
| Angel-Leigh Jones 2008-06-03 ch 2, | abusehiya Another great chapter. I am curious as to what happened to lucia before. Can't wait to find out. Very good writing, keep it up. There’s bound to be a bruise theretomorrow - was half way down in italics. It just needed a space. Minor i know but i saw a article saying that when you review to point out mistakes no matter how minor. Just because as a author you edit and edit many times but there will sometime still be one or two. I edit my chapters often and still find mistakes. So thats the only reason why i pointed out such a minor mistake. Take heart your writing is excellent. Angel |
| Angel-Leigh Jones 2008-06-03 ch 1, | abusehiya wow what a long chapter but a good one. Your sentences are well formed and its very easy to read. I really enjoyed this chapter and can't wait to read the rest. Keep writing. Angel |
| theslykit 2008-05-08 ch 8, | abuseoh please update soon!! |
| ArghImaPirate 2008-05-05 ch 8, | abuseBah. I'm ANNOYED :) I want him to find out...i'm pretty impatient... but i'm glad he didn't ry anythign Please update soon!! :) |
| the kitten 2008-04-14 ch 7, | abusehey, good one! please post the next one soon! |
| Keloiu 2008-04-09 ch 7, | abuseAwesome!...I can't wait for the wedding and when William finds out how Lucia really got pregnant! Update Soon, Please! |
| ArghImaPirate 2008-04-08 ch 7, | abuseI was afraid you were gonna put this on hold...btw I totally caught the Spiderman quote! :) AH i can't wait until William finds out. BAH |
| Keloiu 2008-03-27 ch 5, | abuseJust read through all the chapters again...GREAT Job!...I love this story and hope you update soon! |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-02-04 ch 6, | abusegreat chapter. I love the over protective big brother part, but one thing really gets to me. William being 35?!! In the setting you have, most men were happy to make it to 35 and expected to die sometime around 45-65. How old is Lucia, too?(I forgot)It just seems like such a big gap. and it is hard for me to imagine a fairly young woman being taken advantage of by some old person. I thought that in her day they married earily. nice story, but the age thing really bothers me. please update soon. your story is always a great read |
| blondiexoxo 2008-02-03 ch 6, | abusehey i really like this story so far i hope u update soon i wanna know what happens between them |
| tlw1 2008-02-02 ch 6, | abuseI like how Adrian loves his sister - I wonder if he could eventually actually become friends with William. I look forward to seeing more interaction between Lucia and William soon. Great update! |
| Keloiu 2008-02-02 ch 6, | abuseLoved this chapter, especially the scene at night were Lucia comes to see William and then William and Adrian's altercation the next morning at breakfast. P.S.-How old is Lucia? |