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I have to say that I do admire Sakura for being able to beat up like half the boys in the whole school. That's one tough chick!

Poor little Yoko chan. She's so little that she doesn't understand everything that's going on simply because she's young.

And it probably isn't a compliment to Kenji to know that he has a fanclub consisting of a bunch of young elementary school students. Poor Kenji... but... at least he has fans, right? (Look on the bright side?)

Anyway, I like this story because it lets you have a glimpse into the character's lives and why they act the way they do, ect. And even though not everything is all happy and nice, that's how it is in real life after all so this story is actually real to me.

And I thought I recognized your name from the reviews. I never connected your pen name to one of the stories I keep up with. Heh heh... woops? Thanks for your reviews and keep up the good work.

And uh... vent some frustration on the torture that is Kenji Watanabe's life? XD

I got myself a couple of minutes to spare and decided to read the story that you suggested for me to read instead of the other one. Indeed, this story is more flowy than the other one. Nice pace, but it could still use just a bit more details -not that I'm complaining too much. Short of a chapter, but got the introduce done other wise. Not bad.

What else was I going to say? 0_o;; Oh yes, judging from the title, I do hope that this won't be too much of the book series of the Unfortunate Events. I do hope not, and it worries me because in the beginning of the chapter, in your author's notes, you wrote that you and your friend randomly came up with this? I don't really have no idea where this is going or what you have in for it, but it interested me enough to make me want to see what you have in store for the story and the characters.

Oh yes, now I know what I really wanted to say. P I do hope that when you wrote 'Worst of all, she was dating the head of the Kendo club...'; that was some kind of foreshadow because it just randomly came up. I do hope that this character has to do something with poor Kneji.

One last thing before I leave you with this review before going into my Japanese class, just thought you would like to know... As much as you may want to change the Japanese Education system or whatever, there really is only three years in high school. That is because there are really three years in middle school. Middle school contains 7,8,9 and high school is 10,11,12. And I'm pretty sure that all of the Japanese schools are kept to be in that system, unless it's a boarding school of some sort.

Other than that, good job making your main character looking pathetic -and I mean that in a good way. xX3 I hope to see something interesting and original come out of this story.

Nani? Sakura protecting Yoko? That's a rare sight to see! Hopefully she'll become more nice! Good work on the story! Um...if you don't mind, would you like to see my story? I recently posted chapter 21 of it. Sorry to ask if you're busy and all. Good work on the story. Keep it up!

Yay, Yoko! The talk about Santa was really cute. Heheh. Kids still think he exists... And if I were Yoko, I'd stay at my friends' houses all the time to get away from Sakura... Though she did prove herself to at least have some heart in there, eh?

Huh. I kinda imagine Ichigo's two little sisters when I think of them, though they're actually quite a bit different. Don't worry, I imagine anime characters all the time. Seems a lot of time, my imagination runs towards existing people, even if they're not much alike, one little thing will make me think of them.

Now, to the constructive criticism part:

In the first paragraph, thing should be think. And in the second paragraph, I think there and her, there should be a were. Other than that, I was so absorbed in the story, I kinda forgot to look for mistakes anymore. Haha. Keep up the awesome work!

Yay for Death Note references. *loves Death Note-especially L-kun!* I wouldn't even understand the hotline to hell thing, if it weren't for you, though!

Don't worry, Kenji-kun, my life also feels like a ball of bad luck. I hope it changes for both of us, soon!

Barley should be barely. (third to last paragraph) And in the second to last paragraph, I believe that passed should be past, but not certain...

Poor poor Kenji and Yoko. I still don't care for Sakura. (MEANIE!)

I'd like to see a chapter on Yoko. I think she's cute.

Wide her horizons should be widen. I saw a few other mistakes, but most of them involved commas needing to be used, so why make a big deal out of it? *shrug* Anyway, love how average Kenji is, and how realistic everything is portrayed-I could never do that, my fantasies tend to go off into these crazy tangents... Grargh. (So check mine out when you can, we'll be faithful readers of each others stuff! I'm all for reading whatever comes next, in this story and more to come-also, give me recs if you see anything good!)

Also, I loke the description of Kimi-chan-I like petite girls, yay!

Nice story! I really hate Sakura. She's so mean! She reminds me of my older sister. But great story! Um...I hope you don't mind but would you like to see my story? It's not very good. It's abbreviated as TCR. Would you like to see? Sorry to ask if you have a tight schedule on you.

Hmm... interesting chapter.

People are really gonna hate Sakura, huh? Cuz she's being such a brat but I have a feeling there is a reason for that. Hopefully Kenji's love for his sister will get to her eventually. I mean, it is true that he's not really gonna do anything if she's bad except tell her to be good but she should listen to her older brother none the less. Can't wait to read her story! So, therefore, I don't really hate her even though she's being nasty to everyone. ;

Hmm... next chapter. Actually any one of those characters sound interesting to read about. I leave it up to you! (I don't remember who Ayeka is right now... and I'm too lazy to look back.)

Keep up the good work! Cuz too many times there are stories about "strong" men who valiently and courageously overcome all obstacles but in real life it's not really like that. So Kenji is like a real person to me because there are a lot of people who feel pathetic and don't really stand out or anything.

GOOD LUCK KENJI! *sends her good luck vibes to an imaginary character*

TEE! (This was a long review. Woops)

Okay, I just noticed the misspelling of Unfortunate in your title.

"Sort of messy though made messy" sounded weird. I THINK I know what you're trying to get across, but... Not everyone will. You should say that he "styled" the hair to look messy, but it's actually controlled to the way he wants it to look. By just using the word "style" right there you are telling the reader that it's not actually messy, but made to look messy. "sort of messy fashion" or "sort of messy style" could clear that right up. You could just use "fashion"" though because otherwise, you'll have two styles in the same sentence.

YOU USED THE NAME JUNPEI! HAHAHAH! I love Junpei... But Akihiko is cooler...

Should be a comma there, "what is it, Junpei?"

Although, Junpei in Persona is NOT a lady's man. Heheh.

Wow, that was short.

But I don't hate your writing, PLEASE DO NOT GET ME WRONG! I'm just trying my best to weed out the parts that need a little fixing. I'm not god... I know my story will need fixing too, so don't hesitate to help me out!

Love it so far, keep it coming!

Not enough shounen ai... *cries*

Kenji really is pathetic. I wouldn't have given my hard-earned cash to the bitch, but I'm meaner. I saw one misspelling that I remember, in chapter one, scrap should be scrape, and I guess that's more of a mixing of words than a misspelling, huh? Unless you meant to say scrap by... I don't know. So, I read both chapter one and two, I'm at Jean's house, so I had time to actually rather than skim. I am so glad I'm not as unlucky as Kenji. Good work so far! I want to show you mine... *cries* Also, though, lowly waging job sounded a little odd. Maybe you could have said low paying job. That's really all I remember... I'm trying to critique... Um... But that's all I can think of. Good luck!

People hated kenta? Not me. I like his style actually. (style of dress) Keep up the good work. yeah! XD

Hey I finally got to read it! I don't have much time, and an annoying kid to watch, but what I read is pretty cool. Keep writing. ...I'll get my stinky thing up here soon enough... I FINALLY finished the outline for part one and started the first chapter-go me! And... bad news. Athena's not coming, at least not this week. I WANNA CRY!

But excellent work, keep on writing!

Plan- Plain

Sorry it bothered me LoL! But I tell you if my sister was ever as rude like that to me I would've kicked her butt out of the house! The guy needs some confidence.

I tried to review this earlier but my internet was being annoying and not working. Well I think so anyway, so if you get two reviews from me, I guess it worked after all.

Anyway, I hope funny stuff starts to happen or Kenji's life looks up

His sister/brother and classmates aren't very understanding, are they?

I'll tell you what you can do, Kenji. Punch Sakura in the face :[