 XxScene QueenxX 2007-09-05 . chapter 1I like the whole "clouds" thing, I actually just published a poem today about clouds...
Anyways, it was nice had some good rhyming and so forth, yet it kept wondering off into different subjects such as "a woman" and about "spiritual" matters. It ,I presume, was used almost as a metaphor, however it just didn't flow to well if you know what I mean. You kept taking the smae thoughts and repeated them in different sentences...
There also were some grammar errors, I must point out. You might want to skim over it once more and export it...
Overall I'd have to give it a 2 of 5.
~Signed,
Kish's Migoto Koneko |