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| ilovevampires2 2007-09-23 ch 1,  | abuseWow. That's really really good. I love it! |
| The Postscript 2007-09-08 ch 1, | abuseGreat job! I really love the message and vivid description. Remember to watch for little grammer mistakes: "And it it hurting, every single muscle and bone" instead of plural muscles and bones which the "every single" implies, "Leaving them massacring, I pretend not to care" because how you have it written now is a fragment of a sentence. Just a few little corrections - overall wonderful work! Keep writing, k. |
| Princess-anna57 2007-09-06 ch 1, | abuseGreat work. Very, very well written and just good. Write on. ~Anna~ ^_^ |