I like the ending. That was my favorite part. It was nice. I kidna like this. Again, simple and short but it works. Good job!

I play bass clarinet, too! Sadly, I feel as though I may have inspired a poem like this before.

I'm sorry that you're jealous, but it's good to have a vessel to release your emotions into.

: )

This produces vivid imagery and is very well written. Jealousy is an emotion we can all relate to and you did a very good job of portraying it. Keep up the good work!

Jealousy isn't a good emotion, but it is natural.

Good job.

Twilight Starr

i guess i can relate to that poem. everyone gets jealous every once in a while, ESPECIALLY when you work really hard for something and yet other people gets the attention.

great job. :)

wait... just like your pen name! ha ha... anyway, nice poem, i actually had this feeling today, (except for the dying part) when i didnt get to play in my volleyball game even though i havent missed a practice...

I like the flow in the poem that's dark, interesting by the way.

Nice work! Its in the style I do enjoy, maybe try reading my Jelousy Haiku poems!

Keep writing,

Nine