The best part about you're stories, poems, or really any of you fiction is the way you can interject so much emotion into all of your work. This is something that most people have trouble with and it really is nessecary in order to be a respected writer. This story, like a lot of your works, reminds me of writers from the beat generation, mostly William Burroughs and Jack Kerouac. They made careers off of just observing their own experiences and writing about the emotions that they went through. Keep up the good work! Hope to read more from you soon.