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| Syrial 2007-10-07 ch 1,  | abuseI've been reading your writtings and I'm quite impressed at your capability so far considering that english was not your native language. If you like I can help you correct any mistakes you might have made. You can view my writtings in my homepage if you like. |
| Frog Tongue 2007-09-08 ch 1, | abuseThe whole general theme of the poem is very good. I like the choice of words throughout the poem. The only thing i might suggest is to change some of the wording that is referring to yourself.. At the beginning of the poem, it is not talking about any person in general 'a particular feeling spreads, regret fills THE heart' the "the" suggests the being removed feeling. Then you say 'it is very natural for ME' and 'I have lost'. you start using i and me. It's sort of like changing the view it was written from. did you purposely do that? tell me if this doesn't make sens. |
| Princess-anna57 2007-09-08 ch 1, | abuseOh my goodness, I can completely relate right now. Just gotta be positive, no? I could feel so much when I read this poem. Well done in conveying the concept. Write on! ~Anna~ ^_^ |