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| jenny 2008-05-14 ch 10, anon. | abuseGreat chapter!! Progression (finally!) though the ending was a bit rushed. Can't wait for the next chapter! |
| highrider04 2008-05-08 ch 10,  | abuselove it great job plz up-date soon and make them longer |
| effervescent-sentiments 2008-05-06 ch 10, | abuseOik. Must there be drama now? Also, seemed a bit soon for them to be kissing. I mean it's a major (not to mention illegal, if she's seventeen) step. However, interested to know what happens, so update please! J. |
| effervescent-sentiments 2008-05-06 ch 8, | abuseHm. Drama drama drama. Not necessarily a bad thing, but - man. I like Shane. He's a tortured sweetheart. Alyssa's all right as well. One screwed up cookie, though. I don't really understand the end. I think you need a more on-the-spot reason for her snapping at him - you wouldn't think she'd be thinking very clearly, eh? J. |
| effervescent-sentiments 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseCute so far. There are some minor typos, but those can be weeded out in a quick edit. Make sure you don't go for stereotypes; that's mostly what I'm seeing now. Nice work. |
| funnechick 2008-05-05 ch 10, | abuseI guess it's good that Shane forgave his brother...although I know I probably wouldn't have been able to. But I guess it did make him realize that he's ready for another relationship. And now that he's ready to risk his job for Alyssa--I just don't know if Alyssa will be able to take the rumors that will go around if anyone finds out about them. |
| running out of time 2008-05-05 ch 10, anon. | abuseYou cannot just leave me hanging there!! Wow, what a chapter, I loved it! Another amazing job, definitely not at all repetitive, amazing! |
| SuperCUTEJensen 2008-05-05 ch 10, | abusegreat chapter I like this chapter they kissed aw its cute...cant wait to see what happens next |
| Hopelessly Cliche 2008-05-05 ch 10, | abuseOMG! Who was there?! They kissed! Aw! They're both not sorry! Aww!! Great chapter, I cannot wait until you update!! :D HC |
| -BeeVee-THEEAmazing 2008-05-04 ch 10, | abuseAHH! That was ridiculously awesome. :] They finally kissed, sheesh! Haha. And that was reall cool that he forgave his brother. NOW... Who was the person that saw them?? PLEASE don't tell me it's Sawyer, that would be awful. But I must have more soon so please... UPDATE ASAP! LOVED IT! As always. Toodles! -Bee- |
| Dreamer of her stories 2008-05-04 ch 9, | abuse'ello. I'd just like to say that this is so perfect and baeutiful. I've been looking for a good romance for a while and I've finally found it! Yay! Thanks so much for writing this but write more! Dreamer |
| xxstarryeyedxx 2008-05-04 ch 10, | abuseI liked this chapter. I wonder who was watching... maybe Sawyer?? good job!! -xxstarryeyedxx |
| nahbihh 2008-04-07 ch 9, anon. | abuseI'm in love with this story. It's extremely well written. The concept of this story is very gripping and you have a strong grasp of writing emotions. I can't wait to read more! Update soon please :] |
| Jaina-Skylar 2008-03-16 ch 9, | abuseAww... cute puppy. Well... I'm glad you're still writing.. it's more than I've been doing with mine, but I've been trying to get back to them... hopefully! :P... well... can't wait until more! Good work! |
| Colie Rae 2008-03-12 ch 9, | abuseOf course I'm waiting for more interaction and excitment rather than the internal pondering but I liked this chapter. It seemed like kind of a filler but I really liked the symbolism of Shane taking care of the dog with so much energy and focus. |