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| Sundown 2007-09-09 ch 1,  | abuseSome really interesting and amusing bits of conversation between the two characters, they have distinct personalities which makes the story readable (trust me, I've read some on here where all the characters seem identical.) Some little confusing bits of information, but I'm unsure whether thats intentional for the work or not, so I'm not going to point them out. Quite fluently written. Overall, I'm intrigued as to where this is going to go! |