Cute ending to the chapter. I like the simplicity of the story. Nice work.

Interesting chapter. I didn't quite understand the big deal about him singing.

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Cute chapter. ^^ The part about kids was sweet.

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Adorable chapter. ^^ I enjoyed reading it and liked the song.

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They are cute together. ^^ It seems like their relationship is heating up. Good job.

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Cute addition. ^^ Except for the nightmare of course. It sounded like foreshadowing. Nice work.

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Nice addition. It was cute of Manny to save her. Jaz definitely has had a hard life. If your brain is damaged enough it won't be able to make your organs work. If your heart, etc. doesn't work then your body just shuts down and dies without mechnical intervention. Good job.

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It did look familiar. Manny seems to really like Jazmine. ;) I liked the Spanish-talking is a turn-on part. Nice work. Keep writing!

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It looks like the talent show will be fun. Sorry for taking so long to R&R. Nice work. Have a fantastic summer.

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Great addition. It's horrible about what happened to Jaz. Nice work.

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Oops. Manuel not Miguel. I'm terrible at remembering characters names. Sorry. Great lyrics.

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Nice addition. It looks like something will be going on with Jaz and Miguel. ;) Wonderful work. Have an excellent day.

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Interesting. I wonder what he'll do for the talent show. It's nice that Jaz isn't perfect. Hopefully everything works out for both of them. Have a fantastic day.

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Poor Manuel. I like Jazmine. It looks like she's going to be a cool character. Nice work. Have an excellent day.

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It's been a couple of months since this story was started, but I wanted to comment anyway. It was a very interesting start. I think the Spanish might be a bit distracting for people who aren't familiar with the language, so most people would probably just skip over those parts and read the translations.