I LOVE YOUR STORY!
YOU ARE SO GOD! XD
very creative vampire explination and I love your characters ;D
please update soon.
I can wait for more

Great, intriguing beginning.

Awesome title.

This story has potential.

Good luck with this story, life, and writing.

Have a terrific day.

~Twilight Starr~

cliffy but a good chapter even tho they didnt really say what was wrong with him, but yea very good but i think u need a little more explaining of the light and dark armies but other then that very good!

this story is awsome very well written i have no problems with it at all goin im my favorits and im looking forward to the next chapters so plz hurry up with them

Cruel and unusual punishment... grr on you. I love the story but gah, you made me review.

You have a great story going but I truly think you could make it better. I'm in a creative writing class, and maybe it's just me being psychotic like usual, but I think you could develop the characters and plot more. Well, in my class, the teacher makes us mimic our favorite writers... use their style and stuff. I think you should try it. Maybe, and please don't take offense because this is the only way I know how to say it, your story will turn out better, less amatuer-ish.

Please keep writing and updating... or at least include me in your email list to send it to me... please?

:O Oh my gosh.
He knows! Post as soon as you can, i can't wait to find out what happens :)

Marissa

Twinkle Twinkle Little Star? What all that about? I'm still loving the story.

I really liked it, good job. I saw a few improper word uses, such as where instead of were; but otherwise, I enjoyed reading it.

Hey! I got all excited and you cliffed it! Suspence! Keeps ya reading, I love it.

I liked it, I love the way you present vampires.

Wow, this is good! I'm loving it so far. So you'd better get that next update up soon. Oh, and by the way I love your pin name too. Because, you know I absolutely adore Full Metal Alchemist. And with that being said, this is going on my faves and alerts!