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| Devin-Jamie 2008-08-04 ch 1,  | abusehehe. I read this one aloud twice, because I liked how it sounded. |
| MoonfireSpam23 2008-05-09 ch 1, | abuseHeh, cute! :P Made me think of when Tohru cleaned up the Sohma home in Fruits Basket... |
| xxopticaldelusions 2008-03-10 ch 1, | abuseLol i found this funny. It's great -- and I love the idea of it being a letter from the mom at the end and the way you made it all rhyme. Good job. |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-29 ch 1, | abuseWash all the laundry and fold it up neat.. it's actually neatly I like this a lot... the whole idea of the modern day cinderella and it being a letter from a mother at the end.. that was a nice little twist... they way you phrase all the chores is really great as well |
| AuthorLittle 2007-10-22 ch 1, | abuseMaybe 'naughty' rugs instead of rotten? Hah, everyone is a carping critic these days. Plz return the favor! Find something stupid about my The Rogshian Revolution. And don't forget to tell me any stories you want reviews on. How is Ariana coming? |
| AluminumMuse 2007-10-06 ch 1, | abuseCute. A few suggestions: Your last verse breaks the soft rythme of the first ones, and seems rather forced. The rythme, I feel, is even more important the the rhyme, and you would immediately notice if that was broken. A simple poem; it fulfills all the requirement of what it is. It's nice to read poetry on here that isn't just festering angst. I don't write poetry myself, though, so I can't give you much critique. Feather La |
| upsidedown.underwater 2007-09-14 ch 1, | abuselol that was great :] |
| Rose's Thorne 2007-09-12 ch 1, | abuseI love your take on how doing chores can be compared to a modern day Cinderella. It made me laugh. |
| Justgale 2007-09-11 ch 1, | abuseI loved the part about the trash and the dust bunnies. I would swear you've been peeking in my house. Which reminds me I should be cleaning insteed of reading:) Great Job. |
| Tranquil Thorns 2007-09-09 ch 1, | abuseHaha, I like this one too. =D Very adorable. It reminds me of something Shel Silverstein might write. |
| J.L. Hastings 2007-09-09 ch 1, | abuseAww! Cute! |