Wonderful! I would so love to see this series on the shelves. I'd definitely lengthen it up a bit, though. The part with Ana (in chapter 4?) felt rushed to me, and the last chapter deserves some more time to it. Still, I was hooked! Great job!

Yay!
What a great series! I just wish there'd been some sex scenes...oh well.
I think you wrote the Ana book already, so I'm gonna go read that now ;o)

You know, I would LOVE to see a map of this world. You should make sketches of where the different countries and cities are in relation to each other for each of your worlds and put them on your profile.

Wow, the novel was a good one...What's the title of the next one? i simply CANNOT wait ;)

Aww, I liked it. I like that you write happy endings. I was sad that Siara and Kyrin would *never* see each other again (and perhaps some sort of reason for why they can't/won't would help...), but I suppose the story wouldn't be nearly as good if only happy, sappy events occured. Kyrin would never have been abducted in the first place! :) I did like the twist at the end with everyone's godlines, and the one god, and the ethereal being. Very nice. I wonder if there will ever be a story about the son/ethereal being and why his creation was needed? :)

I thought Kyrin wasn't supposed to remember his sister...

“Knowing Palli, I would not doubt it,” Kyrin admitted. “My sister always used to grumble about his network of spies, but everywhere we traveled, I would hear whispers of his charitable works. From what I understand, he was responsible for more than one corrupt official either losing his job or losing an election.”

i am really enjoying the story though :)

Interesting . . . Kyrin and Mara would be really cute together. I wondered about Gari. He was just too weird. Now it makes sense.

Oh, and nice double entendre on the last line. Very sly.

First of all, I'm loving this. You're doing a great job of interweaving the stories, the complications, the politics, etc. And I re-read the scene with Siara and Kir, and it flows fine. I was just distracted the first time. Most of the time, I read so fast that it's almost like skimming, so when I'm not totally concentrated, I miss things. In this case, I managed to skip the one sentence that explained the situation and tied into the previous scene.

Second, thank you for bringing Palli back! He's an awesome character. One thing, though . . . I have trouble feeling out how old he is. Because I thought he was rather old when he was interacting with Siara and Kyrin, but I thought Mischa was pretty young, and now that I know they've been involved for so long . . . am I missing something?

Really, that's incredibly minor. I'm just being nitpicky because you're so good that more advanced criticisms are the only ones truly applicable.

Damn you and your plot twists!

But . . . I . . . Siara and Kir just finally got their act together, and now you tell me she's going to die? What the hell? This better be some sort of "possible" future or a Harry Potter stunt like Rowling pulled at the end of the last book . . . otherwise I don't know if I'll be able to face another of your books.

Okay. Deep breaths. I know that you believe in irrevocably happy endings. I'll just hold that hope in my heart until the end . . . *sob*

By the way, I totally didn't catch the transition from "I won't hurt you" to "woohoo, we're sleeping together!" It just felt a bit sudden, like I wasn't filled in on the details. Then again, I'm reading this in school, and thus there are more distractions than usual . . . oh well. I'll just keep reading now.

By the way (before I forget), if you want to see a skilfull handling of a similar premise (4 elemental users, a country crumbling, etc.), where the author manages to intertwine four stories in three books, as well as the stories of a rebellious population, read Midori Snyder's Oran Trilogy.

Just a suggestion. Her transitions might help you flow better (not that I've noticed any glaring problems, but you seem to think it an important concern). Anyway, later!

Oh, interesting . . . I knew Ana had an important role to play.

And she wrote the History of Merata! Perfect! I was going to say that the history's tone sounded out of sync with the rest of the book, but now that I know it's Ana speaking, it fits exactly into her method of speech.

This is not a very constructive bit of criticism (in other words, I don't know what you can do with it), but I think this scene lacks . . . drive. It's such a compelling scenario, and yet I didn't feel as involved as I have in other parts of the books. Maybe it's that so much happens so fast. Siara goes from inner thought to confusion to shock to analysis of the fight to acceptance in just a chapter. And not a very long chapter at that. I don't know. It just felt a little rushed and overall not as deep.

I just finished reading the series I loved it,It was amazing! I can't wait to see what comes next if you do decide to write about "The Ethereal Being" and hopefully we will get to find out what happens with Ana also Argynn and Balia.
Keep up the great writing!

The windsnit sounds adorable. Like the fairly humorous note you started off this story with.

YAY! I finished reading the series! ^^ It was spectacular! I loved it! If you ever decide to get published, pm me or something, I'll definately read it!

An excellent end to the series.

I do agree that there are some loose ends that could be tied up...but the reader can also imagine (like...will Ana marry their son..? Are Balia and Argynn finally going to be together...?)

Anyway, good writing, I would suggest attempting publication of this if you have not yet started.

good luck on future endeavors!