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Ri 2008-08-16 ch 14, anon.	abusePlease update soon XD it's so long since the last chapter. I checked the page everytime but no update still. Great plot!
Ish Mish Kiki 2008-08-16 ch 14,	abuseWhoohoo!! Nice chap~
DesperateWindsDoppelganger 2008-08-07 ch 14,	abuse;-; Wow, started up this story, too, and love it so far! Raine is absolutely adorable!
the-truth-is-verity 2008-07-27 ch 14,	abusehm. hm. well, brilliant writing as usual :) i like the way the story is progressing, i just really hope they all sort out their stuff soon :/ please update asap!!
Ri 2008-07-23 ch 14, anon.	abuseOh my...i miss reviewed another chapter. Please forgive me. I laying typhus for the whole month (and i keep reading your updates via my handphone for 'yaoi health'..whut the..but can't reviewing via mobile)... Please update faster...XD it's getting more and more interesting. You've given us a 3 'happy' chapters...and i really really hope for a high dose of angst next. The meeting with lindt gave me a slight surprised, but not that histerical. I kinda doubt that Ivan being kind already...please make him do another mistakes! which he'll incredibly regret! (i kinda support other reviewer idea about threesome...hahahaha...that'll make Raine broken) evil grin Please update soon! and more dose of angst. My life miserable lately that i want to read more and more angst story...hahahaha (but please keep this only as a suggestion and keep your original idea flow) Thanks to the visit to my deviant. Glad u like it. The Convince the Narcissist have a story of course, cause i'm kind of illustrator who hates pictures(beautiful or not) without concept or meaning. But of course, my slight concept cannot be compared to the writer such u are( i allow you to remake the story if you wish). I find it difficult to create script for my own video-game. One can only got 1 main talent eh... Keep up the good work...this review already too long...:))
uniqueindividual 2008-07-23 ch 14,	abuseAw! The whole caring Ivan is so cute! But I have to say the whole Lidnt thing is just so sexy! Can you do a threesome?...please?
Bedraggled Atelier 2008-07-22 ch 14,	abuseLucky you! I have to come back to school in about three weeks! I wish Ivan becomes a lot more gentle to Raine! It is very painful to read at some moments. It's 1 in the morning here, so I think I should sleep! :D Update soon, please!
Blade-of-Sorrow 2008-07-22 ch 14,	abusei honestly think this story gets better with every update i am falling in love with your story and can't wait for an update and it is nice to see that Ivan has almost given up being a prick lol
Bluheise 2008-07-22 ch 14, anon.	abuseWhile I adore the story, I have to be constructively criticizing and suggest that you perhaps find yourself a beta of some sorts, just to fix up those little bits that are beginning to confuse me. For example, I often can't tell if you're trying to use past or present tense. And always using the word "would" as some sort of verb is confusing. For example saying "She would smile gently.." is almost contradicting itself. It would be better to write it was "She smiled gently.." , sticking with past tense. Also, careful when using those "..."'s! Don't over-do it!
Wanabet 2008-07-22 ch 14,	abuseAww, Ivan did something nice. BUT he is still on my personal hit list, until he stops being a jerk 100%. Great last two chapters, Update sooN!
pandasXrobots 2008-07-21 ch 14,	abuseaww that was so cute. evidence to back up why i love ivan and raine now. yay!! but lindt made me happy only because of what he said about ivan. aww man. i cant wait for the next chapter!!
Quietly Losing Control 2008-07-21 ch 8,	abuseI really really like this but can I suggest you stick to one tense. One minute it's in past tense, then a whole chunk in future tense (which is a very unusual way of writing) and then back to past tense for a bit. It's a bit confusing and slightly annoying. But apart from that everything else is great and I love it, so keep up the good work :)
LizLizLiz 2008-07-20 ch 14,	abuseMore like, in love with you! :D And Ivan and Raine. :)
MisterScotty 2008-07-20 ch 14,	abuseWO! I love fast updates, they are fabulous! :) I don't really know how to react to Lindt's reaction. It sort of came out of nowhere. To me, his character wasn't really built up and detailed, so i don't know. But his conversation with Ivan that one time did sort of help with this scene, but not a lot. So it felt sort of weird to me? It could be just me. Anyways. I loved this chapter! It was soo... YAY YAY YAY. I seriously hope Ivan is changing. Although i have to admit the rape scenes were kind of hot...well less the rape...more the sex, but i'm a pervert so yeah... Basically, superb job! I'm lovin' it.
Catseye*Rose 2008-07-20 ch 14,	abuseWow, that was a fast update! O_O Was Raine actually trying to convince Raine that Ivan was a good guy...? Wow...does this mean he's grown? O_o Aww! Ivan and Raine are so cute. Ooh, a ring! I was thinking it might be that...but you never know...:P Looking forward to the next chapter!

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