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| Sunnyboy02 2008-06-07 ch 14,  | abuseRather good. You should totally make the Prince from England be a the big evil guy and then what's his name...Anthony and the jaryd dude or whatever his name is can fight for Raine! But pretty awesome. Xeres |
| thatsmyname 2008-03-14 ch 14, | abuseI LOVE THIS!! PLEASE continue! |
| soccer diva 2008-02-06 ch 14, | abuseAw, I feel so loved! ;) Good chapter, as always. I was VERY happy to see the alert in my inbox, it brightened up my day. My only qualms lay in the fight. It seemed a little bit rushed is all. I liked how you made it more realistic with her not having everything easy, but I think that you should have extended the fight maybe a paragraph more, put more descriptions into the time between Charde's strong, knee-buckling blows to the sluggish one that lead to his defeat. Other than that, I really like the progression of the story and of the plot, and I honestly can't wait for more! Peace and love, and update soon! |
| Lionesscouer 2008-02-05 ch 14, | abuseHi there.. I just found this story today, and I love it.Its very well written and definitely has me intrigued and impatient for the next chapter! I really like Raine and how she so very strong and has no problem proving her strength. I am surprisded she didn't figure out Anthony's secret.. but I'm sure she will soon.. please keep updating this! |
| Anehalia 2008-02-05 ch 14, | abuseI still love the story! I understand about not updating,I have people that worry when it takes me a while to update. I don't think that they understand how long it takes when you rotate stories to write on... Anywase, why critisise a good story with a strong and well wrote out fight seen. Hope that you write again cause I still love how well your story is going, and you will continue to receive nice long replies as long as your story is still so great! |
| jenjen-0 2008-02-05 ch 14, | abuseHaha, I liked that last part, making her fall asleep...Update soon! |
| Anehalia 2007-12-29 ch 13, | abuseOnce again I can't wait to read more! My sister won't beleive me that you are so good so she refuses to even try the story. i will try to keep working on her because I really like the story. A little bit of grammer, but that was about it. I really like how you have the reader in the same place (knowledge wise) as the character. Sometimes authors like to be omniposent and just give away all the imformation. Nice way to do a good job. Keep up the good work! |
| soccer diva 2007-12-29 ch 13, | abuseThis is a really good story. Just be careful of spelling errors. I noticed those a few times, like 'know' instead of 'now' and things like that. But I know that it's hard to catch those kinds of things, and they didn't really take away from the story. Can't wait for more! |
| jenjen-0 2007-12-29 ch 13, | abuseOoh interesing, a fight huh? Well, let's hope she wins lol! |
| jenjen-0 2007-12-29 ch 12, | abuseCute little chapter! Yay he came to save her! |
| jenjen-0 2007-12-29 ch 11, | abuseLol definately a frenzy of updating! I think the pace of the story is good. Hmm how will she get out of this predicament with the Duke then? |
| jenjen-0 2007-12-29 ch 10, | abuseLol cute! At least he's friendlier. But what else is he hiding I wonder... |
| Anehalia 2007-12-19 ch 9, | abuseI really can't wait to read more. I'll tell my sister to read it when she gets home from colledge. I THINK she'll like it. Please hurry upand continue writing. I check as often as I can. |
| jenjen-0 2007-12-16 ch 9, | abuseHehe crown prince with wings huh? And Anthony using some kind of magic? Hmm...interesting. |
| jenjen-0 2007-12-14 ch 8, | abuseOoh what cover? Hmm... |