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| Butterfly Masquerade 2007-09-30 ch 1,  | abuseI can't really determine what the "lie" is, but it's a wonderful poem that tells a story. Those are always the best to read. |
| changed.by.an.afterthought 2007-09-30 ch 1, | abusetalking to someone helps them. people can tell when ur not happy with them. but they need you too tell them, what their doing wrong so that they can fix themselves... just a thought though... - changed p.s. again, its a great way of showing how u feel. |
| Ramenluver 2007-09-14 ch 1, | abuseWhen you said 'nine months' in the first line, the first thing that popped into my head was that someone was having a baby. You might want to change it to eight months, just to avoid confusion. It's so very sad when people endure silent agony like that. -Ramen |
| Princess-anna57 2007-09-12 ch 1, | abuseOh my goodness that must be so hard. :( Always be positive. Well written piece. The emotion is expressed very well. Great. Write on. ~Anna~ ^_^ |
| Sendo1920 2007-09-12 ch 1, | abuseWow. That certainly was emotional. Nice job. |
| TheNarglesWillEatYou 2007-09-12 ch 1, | abusegeez, ur really good at poetry! this one is less violent than the ones i've read, but they're all really good! |