This is an awesome story, but it made me shed tears already (curse you). Continue it please.

Great story! It could be fleshed out a bit more, but it's a good quick read. I like the characters and the overall upbeat-ness despite some heavy material.

Livi

WOOT! HOLY FUCKING WOT! lol, ok, I just had to exert some energy there because your story is SO FUCKING AWESOME. lol, that was fantastic! I'm so glad I read it! Best threesome EVER, and it was a meaningful story. Not just PWP, lol. I was just surfing the stories and I HAD to stop and read this one, because it looked so good! I couldn't wait to read it! And the way you described the music--the way Mark plays the piano IS totally freaking hott. I LOVE this story, without a doubt. Thanks for writing it! You rock!

That Was The Worst Ending Ever! OMG! I Hate It Its Awful.
The Rest Of The Story Was Good Though. But Seriously I HATE THE ENDING!

Yummy...

Done! All righty then, overall review time.

The begining to this was very nice, as I had said, poetry lingered EVERYWHERE throughout this story. The characters were all constructed well, each with their own distinct personallity.

My critique, is that the story line just seemed a tad far too rushed for the type of relationship that the three men were develing into. It would have made more sense if, Dan and Blake had already been in a realationship and coazed a broken hearted Mark into the relatioship with him.

I liked the title of this story a lot "the Three Laws of Motion", you may want to go back sometime and try to tidy it up, otherwise, it was pretty good. If you need any help beta-ing, feel free to drop me a line.

Best Wishes, Helena Emma S.

Yey! Go Dan go! w00t w00t! =D

-Helena Emma

=[ gah, the guys should have just followed Mark insides straight away. I have to admit, it's kind of silly of you to blurt your own swears out after writing a semi-smut threesome... X_X'

That's cute, poor little Mark... way to think through your run-away plan... a little late but better late than never. My only confusion is doesn't he know his own address?

Oh woah... hottness ^_^=

-Helena Emma S

I like this a lot so far, the only little thing that I can complain about is some of dialog, it flows, but it just seems a little un-natural in some of the human reactions.

=)

"Not everyone wants to live like you do at the crazy house, Dan." He turned to Mark. "He has ten brothers and sisters. And every single one is insane like him. It's creepy."

aw that must have been SUCH a quiet household. Danny reminds me of my character Marcel, bisexual and half-asian... common theme it seems to be for asians to be the wild sex children!

jaja, ne?

Is it bad that I was overly amussed by Mark going after the guy witj a baseball bat? >_

Your poetry laced within these paragraphs is divine. I'll keep reading, I like this a lot so far. How come not more people have found it?

-Helena Emma S.

I love the story. It was awesome. All of my friends like it too. Bye.