this was very intense, and very frank. i really liked the kind of pattern/voice you go into, and you use things like repetition that really bring to life the image of falling into a hole, perhaps echoing and emptiness and the like. the only phrase that didn't fit with the mood was "because it's so damn hard", i think because it was so conversational, and everything else was more introspective. but honestly, that's all i could find to change. very emotional, and very good.

H.