Nice work, I'm sure many can relate to this topic, decent flow, solid poem.

SO MANY COMMAS! you dont need any

this is pretty good

but, seriously, must you be so dramatic? like, i know they betrayed you, but come on. hes your best friend scott!

other than that well written, its funny how poems give out more emotion than you were actually feeling when you were writing it. i find that with my poetry too you know. maybe thats why people call me depressed, because my poetry gives out a very strong feeling of depression. oh well... that's how i like it!

srz

born in heaven

burns in hell

Aww this is so sad. I can completely relate. Stay strong. I could really feel so much emotion in this poem. Write on!

Anna _