cute, but too many images, pretty soon all you hear is "every"...nice ideas though. check out my stuff and review if you've got time, thanx! :-D

This was really good, but the problem is with the last bit. It's a touch too repetitious. Perhaps it should have been shorter or changed a bit.

~Cirien Phoenix of the Eternal Phlame

I can tell why it never made it in the newspaper for your school. I understand it but the last verse should have given with more flame, more excitement. When u talk about love u should make the reader want to be in love. This was good but the last part seemed to run on and the order should be revised.

PJs1867 (check out what I have I know I have mistakes to)

Transparent poem but isn't it a bit too positive. Love can rears its ugly head too, you know.

If this didn't make it to your school newspaper, the people really need a good explanation why not to put a story this great in. It's a sweet poem, but not too sweet, and it actually makes sense to me ^-^