Reviews for The Teacher from Hell

Reviews For: The Teacher from Hell

Melissa Norvell 2008-04-27 ch 6,	abuseThis is a refreshing story from all of the advanture and romance I've been reading lately. I was cracking up at this chapter. It definitely made my day!
talentless author 2008-01-28 ch 4,	abuse'his goatee having more than he did on the top of his head.' I don't why but I really like that line. It tickles my funny bone. 'I began my pick up line'~ oh no, he didn't... and he did it to the principal! How ironic. Ah, Do I see a flirtatious relationship blooming? I like the chemistry between the two. I've gotta tell you now I absolutely, POSITIVELY love the nerds descriptions. All for G.E.E.C.!! Sorry it has taken me-ugh forever to r&r.
Melissa Norvell 2008-01-22 ch 5,	abuseI knew its been a while since I've seen you update this. I was wondering if you planned on continuing it and I'm glad that you did. I know how writer's block is. I have a case of that myself. Good luck with your next chapter.
Melissa Norvell 2007-12-09 ch 4,	abuseAnother interesting chapter. Good job!
talentless author 2007-12-06 ch 3,	abuseI would like to know why he was crying blood at the beginning. It helps by not leaving the readers wondering what they missed and it also gives more insight to Malice and a connection to him. I realize that you need some kind of marker to separate breaks in the story. It helps so readers won't get confused. Like when the scene shifts from Malice talking about starting his job soon to the cemetary scene. 'I had to do everything at 120 today for this was my dream. If it could only be my destiny, I thought. I knew why I was sent here and that mission would have to come before everything else for I loved peoples kids but I loved my own two even more than life itself.'- I got confused here, do you mind clearing it up for me? Malice didn't strike me as a guy who liked kids either. The way you write this story is very beautiful and poetic. “Look, you sly sons of bitches, Aerants may be invisible but that gives you no right to sneak up and spy on me, no matter how sexy I may be.” -I LOVE THIS QUOTE! I got a good laugh out of it as well as the next following line: “look below you idiot.” Heehee~Malice has a canine friend with a worse potty mouth then him! Awsome. Will be waiting for more.
Melissa Norvell 2007-11-22 ch 3,	abuseInteresting couple of chapters from you. I definitely look forward to the next update.
talentless author 2007-11-07 ch 2,	abuseAny advise I give does not need to be heeded. I think a clearer transition from 'Rain drenched my worn out clothing as I exited the diner' in the first paragraph to 'Soon as I gazed into the golden sky' in the second paragraph is needed so readers won't get confused at how it was suddenly sunny. 'a view of the marvelous city and gazed'-I think you are missing an 'I' after 'and'. 'rested in the floor.' ~in~ should be on '~wit~ no blemishes whatsoever.' small spelling error. 'I breathed in the frigid night air in deeply'- This part of the sentence needs to be fixed because it's not smooth or flowing like some of your other sentences. What you can do is move a word around and drop one of the 'in' words. Something like this: 'I deeply breathed in the frigid night air' 'I pulled various things out of the ~water~ such as'- I think you mean wallet? 'A slight breeze ~of a wind~ licked'- you don't the of a wind part since a breeze is just that and it makes the sentence redundent. 'a whole hood' Is that suppose to be neighborhood? Again I apologize for sounding so nit-picking and pushy but on to good things! Again superb job on the details! And Malice is shaping out to be a very amusing hellish character you don't want to mess with. Hell shard-very cool! Aerants-Can't wait to read and learn more about them. They sound very interesting! 'I slid those and a pack of condoms from his wallet just in case, into my pocket'-My favorite line. Just in case huh? Looking for some r&r later?^_^ I'm starting to like Malice even more when he's not spouting off his potty mouth! Things are starting to roll and get more intense! I can't wait for more!
Melissa Norvell 2007-11-05 ch 2,	abusefaves I do that to very few stories, but I absolutely love this. You're very descriptive and the story flows at a nice and even pace. Plus I like things that have to do with angels and hell, as well as how other people interpret them (I guess because I'm working on Sacrifice, which has a lot to do with angels) I'll definitely be back. If you have the time, I'd be honored if you would check out some of my works, you may find something you like.
sweetcynicism-chan 2007-10-15 ch 2,	abusewaahh..at first I thought it was Hell Teacher Nube-ish...but I was wrong. It was very serious but at the same time funny (Milton Hotel haha) I hope to hear more from you. I can't wait to meet his students :)
talentless author 2007-10-05 ch 1,	abuseFirst I wanted to thank you for the review, it's much appreciated and I'm sorry it took me this long to read your stories. I'm more than happy to return the favor. Firstly, I love the beginning! It's filled with great vivid detail and the first sentence, I believe, did a great job of setting the mood, place and visual not to mention it grabbed my attetion. I was hooked. Second, I like how you incorporated the five senses in the story. I got sound, plenty of visuals, great descriptions on touch, smell and taste. I did spot a few mistakes, but not wanting to sound too nit-picking I'll just mention a few. 'A red liquid steadily raced won my upper lip'-your trying to say down instead of won, right? Stuff like that always happen to me when I type really fast and don't look back. 'I crawled towards a close by garbage'- I think this sentence will sound better if 'close' was replaced with 'near'. I think I spotted a few more, that or the screen is screwing with my eyes now... I'll just shut up now and end this review, ehh sorry it's so long as well. I hope you don't mind. Oh! One more thing, I forgot to mention that I love the interaction between the waitress and Malus. His reactions, thoughts, and answers cracked me up. I can't wait to read more. I seems this story is just getting interesting.

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