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Amindaya 2008-04-21 ch 6,	abuseAw, that was a sweet little story. :)
Choice 2008-04-10 ch 6,	abuseAw, I loved this story. (: It was so romantic, delicious and cute! Wonderful job!
RoseLife 2008-04-06 ch 6,	abusenaww SO CUUTE fabulous job, really ^^
Mistress of Apple Pie 2008-03-16 ch 6,	abusevery cute story. =)
Jishu26 2008-02-27 ch 6,	abuseAaw...that was so sweet~! I love the story!! And I hate Bethany~! She's a yaoi hater XD.
Jishu26 2008-02-27 ch 1,	abuseBWAHAHAHHAHA~! Poor Kale... but I'd think like Xander too if somebody will just randomly tell me to "sleep together" coz it can cure his insomnia. XD
Back of Beyond 2008-02-26 ch 6,	abuseGreat story, definitely going on my favourite stories list. :]
Vidal Wu 2008-02-24 ch 6, anon.	abuseI actually loved your story... it was really great, what with the character development and lovey-dovey-ness, although not a lot of people seem to like that... but enough formalities! IT WAS ** WICKED. there, I said it. great stuff. keep on writing! its like teddy bears pooping white strawberries.
GASPtrinitrotoluene 2008-02-01 ch 6,	abuseYAY
paputsza 2008-01-29 ch 6,	abuse...hopefully they'll die together. or get stronger or something... together... sequel : :\| :
paputsza 2008-01-28 ch 2,	abuse...oh, i think i sensed a deeper meaning in that part with the ice cream shop. kind of like the wolves of kromar but more subtle and less depressing. and wouldn't it be awesome if he was suddenly like "oh my god. you're right sam. i am gay. all this time." but i doubt it. this story makes me tired. it's funny though.
cudmore.mb 2008-01-20 ch 6,	abuseI must say, I read three chapters a few days ago, and was quite enchanted, not having read much of this sort before. Then tonight, well after my bedtime, I decided to read another chapter. Well, I couldn't stop. I had to continue, no matter what, so here I am at the end, and I loved the story. Know that during that last scene, I had to pause and lean forward into my desk a few times, smiling too brightly, sleepy, enchanted. I'm so glad at the way it ended. Ah, yes, and at numerous points throughout, though I no longer remember exactly where, I gave quite a joyed laugh. I also felt angry at that ** Bethany. And terribly sad for Kale. And quite impressed with Sam. A fine story. Thank you for it. Not to sleep and dream of it!
sicca-chan 2008-01-18 ch 6,	abuseAfter reading your story, I felt so giddy. It's totally great. Sweet overall, a little drama, some funny parts and a lot of kawainess!! I especially liked the ending. When Kale started screaming at Xander, it totally threw me off guard. But, I should have expected it. It was purely panicking Kale mode.(By the way,you did a good job on Kale's character.=P)And I really, liked the retrospective Kale did. It was the perfect story to read after a hell week. (sorry if I don't really make sense. I've barely sleep all week due to stupid school projects.Like Kale, i'm not relly coherent right now. xD And it demands too much for my poor brain to write sentences that make sense in english...)
Nub in Denial 2008-01-18 ch 6,	abuseI don't even know how to explain how snuggly this story made me feel inside at its completion. I have to say I like the Latin poem parts the most for some reason... though I'm not sure why. I wish I could go through and give you all of the other things that I loved about this story and why, but it would probably take a really, really, really long time so I guess I'll settle for telling you that it rocked hardcore. Take it easy, -Nub
Lady E 2008-01-18 ch 6,	abuseGood job. This was a good rendition of a classical love story. Problem, problem brings lovers together, blindness to love, romantic tension, climax, denouement and happy ending, problem resolved. However, much of it was cliched, not quite breaking free of the formula to stand as something of its own. Bethany's explosion accompanied with Kale's realization of love in particular was not believable. Her prejudice is very realistic of course, and a bit of suspension of disbelief would even allow for an extreme outburst, but it was the execution, the style, that made the scene seem contrived, even melodramatic. :) I hope you won't mind my pointing that out. I'm not sure it's something you can actually specifically work on; I imagine it would disappear naturally with more practice. But anyway, you have a good foundation to build on! Good luck.

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