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empathic life
2007-09-18
ch 1,
abuseAnother fabulous poem. Great metaphors and such. Wish I were smart enough to figure them out... I'm definitely in love with the last two lines. I don't know why. They just seem... out of place with the rest of the poem, in a refreshing way. But yes. Overall, a wonderful piece. -e.l.
Fen-Shay
2007-09-17
ch 1, anon.
abuseLove it. Especially the "but to give the news... / that’s crying with dry eyes / too tired to even think past / the next name on the list" bit. You touch me with your gentle atheism. ;)
SirScott
2007-09-16
ch 1,
abuseIs that one of those leather bound Bibles? They wouldn't make a very good surface for writing.

~SirScott
WyrdWolf
2007-09-16
ch 1,
abuseThe metaphors through the first half were interesting, even though I couldn't really grasp them. The last stanza was very fresh. Crisp lettuce fresh.

Wolfie
Anaare
2007-09-16
ch 1,
abuseThat last stanza is very powerful. I love the message this poem appears to bring. Quite intense. The first lines seem a bit wavering, not quite steadfast, but as the poem continues, your voice gains strength and goes out with a figurative bang. Wonderful stuff!
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