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| empathic life 2007-09-18 ch 1, | abuseAnother fabulous poem. Great metaphors and such. Wish I were smart enough to figure them out... I'm definitely in love with the last two lines. I don't know why. They just seem... out of place with the rest of the poem, in a refreshing way. But yes. Overall, a wonderful piece. -e.l. |
| Fen-Shay 2007-09-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseLove it. Especially the "but to give the news... / that’s crying with dry eyes / too tired to even think past / the next name on the list" bit. You touch me with your gentle atheism. ;) |
| SirScott 2007-09-16 ch 1, | abuseIs that one of those leather bound Bibles? They wouldn't make a very good surface for writing. ~SirScott |
| WyrdWolf 2007-09-16 ch 1, | abuseThe metaphors through the first half were interesting, even though I couldn't really grasp them. The last stanza was very fresh. Crisp lettuce fresh. Wolfie |
| Anaare 2007-09-16 ch 1, | abuseThat last stanza is very powerful. I love the message this poem appears to bring. Quite intense. The first lines seem a bit wavering, not quite steadfast, but as the poem continues, your voice gains strength and goes out with a figurative bang. Wonderful stuff! |