I don't get it 100%, but I think Carmine should be uppercase

I can't believe I've never read your work before.

You are truly amazing.

I love this.

I'm probably missing something-as I'm very slow-but I loved the poem nonetheless. You have a very unique writing style and it conveys the story in so little words. Great work.

Creative simile, I like it. :)

hahaha... that's creepy, especially when that's been my own life at times when it really counted that things go according to plan.

they never do.

Very nice job. It was short, but effective. Life is ironic, isn't it? Kudos. ~CD

Simple yet well written, I like this.
Thnx for the constructive criticism, i'll look out for things like those k. =]

too good.

"she was bright, brilliant, and/thirty seconds too late." lovely. brought a smile to my face, that's for sure. :)

It was catchy. I liked it. Keep writing.
-Blood

So true. Congratulations. You made me chuckle.

Very lovely personification and it's an amusing poem. You should post stuff like this, you don't see them often and I like being entertained by your works. Good job!


-C.N

Interesting poem. Nice work.

~Twilight Starr~

i love the sardonicasocity... and no, that's not a word.

Wow! That was really good!

Thanks for the review,
Jess