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| SilentShadow123 2007-10-08 ch 1,  | abuseshort-direct-interesting! |
| CarlyJo 2007-09-17 ch 1, | abuseCoolio! Seems interesting. |
| Jenhmarie Dawn T Frias 2007-09-16 ch 1, | abusehm..it's pretty short, huh?? but one thing confuses me. The vampire Council do not necessarily interfere with the lives of mere commoners..or is it that Elizabeth Bathory is up to no good again? I know Leif would rather that he date her, because that way he could get a week's supply of blood-serum. And, the Council does not want to be called the 'elders'. |
| SamanthaNicole 2007-09-16 ch 1, | abuseI'm taking creative writing as well, though my class is strictly poetry. But I digress - I just wanted to let you know I was jealous that you get to write fiction in your class ;-) This was really interesting. I love that you don't give away the fact that Aiden's a vampire until the end, which makes the story (while short) suspenseful. By the way, love the name Aiden. Have you seen Blood & Chocolate? Because the male lead's name is Aiden. Good movie, if you haven't seen it. “Is it because I’m half French?” - Loved that line. You mention Wisconsin in your story - I'm guessing you're from the Midwest? Because I live in Wisconsin, and I hate the country, haha. Give me the lights of Chicago any day :-) Your dialogue is well-thought out and convincing. This was lovely. Good for you. Cheers, Sammy |
| j 2007-09-16 ch 1, anon. | abusenice. it was short but interesting. i wanna see u create ur own type of monster. something not vampire or werewolfe. : ) but i guess u go with what works. now u must write more and finish one of ur stories. i wanna see how good ur endings are. and climax too. |