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| Carmel March 2008-06-21 ch 8,  | abuseEven though it's been a bit since I've read this story (which I'm so terribly sorry for), I immediately got right into the story line, the characters, everything. I love this :) Keep up the great work! ~Carm~ |
| Nefas Fatum 2008-03-16 ch 7, | abuseIt flows better now, actually, it flows well enough to make me late cause I decided to re-read it about 2 mins before having to leave the house and rather than being able to stop and read it later, simply had to keep reading. |
| Carmel March 2008-03-10 ch 7, | abuseAbsolutely wonderful. I love every bit of this story :) Keep up the fantastic work! ~Carm~ |
| Belladonna Wyrmwud 2008-02-26 ch 6, | abuseAAh! Cliffhanger! hehehe, very nice, I am glad that you decided to update and can't wait for the next chapter! ~Bella |
| Carmel March 2008-02-24 ch 6, | abuseLovely job. You've got a serious talent! Keep it up. I'm loving it :) ~Carm~ |
| AnakLuun 2008-02-22 ch 6, | abuseInteresting point: Why do vamps, who can move so fast and experience no fatigue, have an elevater? Wouldn't it be faster if they just took the stairs anyway? And you skipped a word somewhere towards the beginning, I forgot exactly where... |
| Nefas Fatum 2008-02-21 ch 6, | abuseYay you posted it. I like how she finally comes to an understanding that perhaps she shouldn't have done what she did. Also like that he hasn't changed his mind about loving her... however.. Kaeden moved from being worried about things and apprehensive of meeting another vampire to happily loving Gen. I dunno, that bit sounded wrong. But.. its your story and I enjoyed reading it. :) |
| Carmel March 2008-02-04 ch 5, | abuseEven though it's been awhile since I've been on Fictionpress, I've definitely not forgotten this story. I'm loving it! It's this kind of story that keeps me coming back for more. So, I hope to see more from you soon :) ~Carm~ |
| Belladonna Wyrmwud 2008-01-26 ch 5, anon. | abuseI liked what you added to the chapter and i am very happy to hear that you haven't given up on this story! :) By the way i love how you added the vampires having to count grains of rice thing. You don't see that one too much in movies and books now. lol Kudos to you! ~Bella |
| Ryiel 2008-01-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseOh God, this is just, terrible. How can you actually write this down on paper. You're arms should be aputated, sot, burned, and buried next to hitler to prevent you from ever doing this again. MWAHAHAHAHAHAHA... No really, why is it taking so long there Monica Townsend, you're supposed to be feeding mister Ryiel here lots of good Shard of Anima. |
| AnakLuun 2007-12-30 ch 5, | abuseYou have a few typo but otherwise its another awesome chapter. The worst was "Caleb pointing out flaws in Caleb’s form" the others were just misspelled words. |
| Belladonna Wyrmwud 2007-12-23 ch 5, | abuseWoo-hoo! A new chapter! Very nice one. I like how you describe the assorted scenes. I can see them in my head! lol Hope that your vacation is good! Merry Christmas! Happy Hannukah! Happy Kwanzaa! ~Bella |
| Twilight Starr 2007-11-07 ch 2, | abuseGood chapter. I would be freaked out like Kaeden, too, if someone dropped that sort of news on me. Have an excellent day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Nefas Fatum 2007-11-02 ch 1, | abuse*shows a certain amount of n00b-ness* To your question of why I feel sorry for Caleb.. I can see him going through hell with Kaeden, what with Kaeden being the stubborn type and all. |
| Belladonna Wyrmwud 2007-10-19 ch 4, | abuseYay a new chapter! :) Very nicely done, quite humerous! I really like the line about the cuckoo clock. Very well thought out. I can't wait to find out what happens next! ~Bella |