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Reviews For: My Heart Beats For You
TwentyPoundNote 2007-09-17 . chapter 1
Wow. The descriptions were really good, I felt like I was a fly on the wall. My only criticism would be that at the beginning you're using a different point of view, as if alexis is talking directly to Eric and then you revert back to normal first person narrative. I dunno if it was intentional, but it can be quite confusing. Anyway, great work. Keep it up.
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