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| SirScott 2008-05-14 ch 7,  | abuseGood chapter, very entertaining. ~SirScott |
| Esperanza S. 2008-04-03 ch 3, | abuseI love how feisty bella is. She’s absolutely hilarious (which means your hilarious! Haha) |
| Hoodwynk 2008-03-07 ch 8, | abuseSo cute with Cole and Nicholas, but if it matters, I like Cole better as a protective brother/friend than as a jealous boyfriend. It gives her someone safe to fall back on. That could change though... Oh, and McDonalds? Are you kidding? Greasy, cheap, and not that good. Really good job. I like the poker and esp. Nicholas, Lex and Cole. They catch interest. |
| ria nemikh 2008-02-29 ch 8, | abuseHey!! I just read your chapter! I liked it alot, one thing, what does M.I.A. mean?? anyways, I can't wait 'till the next chapter!!:) -ria |
| ria nemikh 2008-02-19 ch 7, | abusehi, i just finished reading your story (whats there so far anyways). i really like it! i hope you do another chapter, i put you on story alert just in case :) -ria |
| Hoodwynk 2008-02-12 ch 7, | abuseThis is definately one of your best ones yet. Very steady telling. My only problem is with Kate. I realize that she is a 'normal' girl, but when she realizes that her dearest brother and Arabella might die trying to save her, might she at least survey her surroundings to see if there is some feasible way to escape her circumstances. Sort of a step-up thing; an impromptu-hero-wannabe. If that just isn't in her personality or situation, obviously ignore it. Just a consideration that when people have no choice but to do something, they usually do it or come darn close. |
| SassyLil'Thunderstorm 2008-01-19 ch 7, | abusehm I want to know what their plan is! Grr suspense!! |
| SassyLil'Thunderstorm 2008-01-19 ch 6, | abuseHm complicated chapter, had to keep things straight but I worked it out. Good job with not making things so simple. |
| SassyLil'Thunderstorm 2008-01-19 ch 5, | abuseWhoo ho way to go Nick...I knew I liked that guy, even if it was for the wrong reason lol. |
| SassyLil'Thunderstorm 2008-01-19 ch 4, | abuseGotta love drama! Well actually its kind of an obsession of mine when it comes to fiction... |
| SassyLil'Thunderstorm 2008-01-19 ch 3, | abuseI'm kind of in a love/hate mode with Nick...I hate him b/c he's an **, but love him b/c he does it so well...lol |
| SassyLil'Thunderstorm 2008-01-19 ch 2, | abuse-Little mistake: 'She was different from the acne riddle girl that was abducted years ago.' Should be acne ridden. I like the contrast between the two childhood friends. Good job! |
| SassyLil'Thunderstorm 2008-01-19 ch 1, | abuseHello! Sorry it took so long to R/R you back, thanks again for all of the reviews! -little thing that threw me off a bit: 'Twelve-year-old daughter of the billionaire business tycoon Cody Dawn, Arabella, exclaimed.' A little akward, I had gotten a bit confused about who you were referring to by the end of the sentence. Do you think 'Arabella, the twelve-year old daughter...' sounds better? Or is it just my brain? -Small mistake: 'She failed to see the suspicious white van pull up and studied them.' Should be that pulled up and studied them or pull up and study them. Good start! didnt expect that at all. |
| Tears of Deathwishxxx 2008-01-12 ch 7, | abuseWhat is the plan? LOL. Me and other readers wish to know, but however- but what do those bastards want with Arabella? |
| Hoodwynk 2008-01-10 ch 6, | abuseNice in remembering Kate and Tori. And the complicated plots are one of your trademarks, so don't worry about it. Nice twist with Nicolas' twin, though her abandonment of the former caught me off gaurd. |