Well worded poem. I really liked it. ^^

~Twilight Starr~

awesome

This is an interesting poem. I like the words in it that evoke a lot of thought in what people are attracted to, lol.

I think the line I liked the most was: "The burning desire, smoldering within your body, Screaming for you to satisfy your hunger."

There's just smoething in them that actually talk about the point of lust to me.

C.S.

That's gorgeous! I would like it better if it weren't written about the person talking, though. You know like, see her hair, see her skin, her beauty, instead of mine mine mine, because it sounds really vain. Nicely written, though. :D

Love,
~Dia

Haha, I love the fact this was written in Health. Perhaps you should be the teacher instead. This was a great concept, though the image of this girl was a bit cliche. I think it was supposed to be though. Good job.