the last part of this chapter was hilarious! is her hardcore shell slowly disintigrating- very, very, very slowly of course but in the beginning she would have slugged him. so- just for whatever- the mystical creature dudes are gathering for her? that osrt of makes sense now with the last chapter and her being an allmighty bad-butt hunter.

I absoloutely LOVE your story! Caden is awesome! He is by far one of my favorite characters out of all of the stories I have read. Update soon!

It's Sekhra! Who... doesn't feel like signing in right now.

Sorry I've been kind of absent. :( I'll try to make it up to you sometime. Anyhoo, about the chapter:

- time limit with the roses. Nice. Plus you know how much I love using the rose as a symbol.

- "Elaborate words from an elaborate soul." Best. Line. Ever.

- I love Caden. He's such a complex character and he really makes things interesting. He's a guy I'd want to have on my side.

- Vesper and Pace have gotten more interesting as well. Love Vesper's animal freak out on the Naga back there. That made me laugh. It's nice to get good and bloody every once in a while. And the Laundromat scene? Masterful. It shows that Vesper's not all bad and doesn't prey on the weak, but that doesn't stop her from beating the shit out of annoying creepy bad guys.

xoxo, keep writing, make me look bad, etc.

Sekhra

Nice story.

Oh oh, candy! Yay! Yes, yes, I sympathize with Vesper... killing your sibling, just not something that's allowed. When the heck is Caden gonna kiss her already? Cause, I really can't see VESPER kissing HIM... I can see her maiming him, but not kissing him... There WILL be kissing, right?

I've been reading your story for a while but i just thought to send a review now... i'm kinda slow sometimes, haha.

But seriously, I love your story. The characters are real and they don't follow the stereotype that's been played out so often. In this last chapter Caden seemed a little out of character, but I love him nevertheless.

*nom nom nom* M candy! That was such a cool chappy, and I CAN'T wait for the next one, I want to know more! Heh, I felt a little sad when Pace was filled in on why Caden was staying at Vesper's flat, cause I thought they might stop fighting and thats just funny to read, but yay, they still fight! Oh and the end? So very interesting, Vesper has some "real" emotions in there. And Larry! Hes cool, very "wise man", and a hobo, class.

haha, yay me then! I loved this chapter (of course, which chapter don't I love?) it was amazing. And I love-e-e-e how long they are! Keep it up and update soon!

Faith

And, if you'd like to, I posted another story titled "Prelude to a kiss" it isn't supernatural, but I like it so far :)

The plot thickens! And oh, the sexual tension...

Love the line "It wasn't socially acceptable to kill your siblings," BTW. I also like that the "wise guide" is a hobo.

Anyway, love the story, update soon, et cetera.

I'm going to pick out the bits and pieces I liked about this chapter. Because I can. And I'm going to make this a long review. Because I can.

"Especially when doing so might lead to her braining someone who was being annoying."

I like the verb 'braining'. Very graphic. _

"Vesper found herself staring at him. She quickly ripped her eyes away and turned to Pace who was watching her suspiciously."

Haha! I think she liikkeess him. Oh lala.

"Slumber party"...oh, Caden. Classic.

And the hobo. Larry. Aww! Such wonder and excitement.

And your authoritative comment on him. I giggled like a small school boy.

SO, I'm kind of pissed off that Vesper won't realize her feelings for Caden. Or that he didn't kiss her. Or that she didn't tackle-cling-kiss him at the very end. But I must say, I am overly hyped for the next chapter (and the next and the next). And I want to squeal for this evil villain of which you speak.

So woot for you my pet! Fantabulous chapter, like always. Your cobra like updating skills are intimidating.

BTW, I AM THE ROSE PETAL STALKER. Sadly, I'm joking.

finally Pace is in the loop- whether it si a good thing or not we'll probably fid out later. i am so intrigued, who is the 'he' the naga was talking about?

WOOT. So my favorite line this chapter was...

"The hobos were like fucking vultures."

El-oh-el at that. Things are getting pretty twisted with that naga, eh? Ho ha he. Okay, so I don't want everything to unmystify yet, but I do want to know! A.K.A., I want you to update with the speed of an angry cobra.

Good work!

Amazing so far! This is an incredible, original idea, and I can't wait to see how it will turn out.

Wow Caden really reminds me of my friend... Can't keep his mouth closed for a minute... Who the heck needs to torture when all you gotta do is ask?

So far only one suggested improvement- a little bit too much repetition in the action scenes. "She whipped her ""gun"" up, taking another step back to move out of the way of a blow, but the naga’s other hand came up quickly, almost knocking her ""gun"" clean out of her hand." The second use of "gun" may be changed to something else, a pronoun or maybe "the weapon", something to that effect. The fact that you repeated a couple of words doesn't take away from the overall storyline, and considering I'm an action, romance, and goth junkie it's pretty much all good.

As usual keep writing... (P.S.- How many times does someone need to say something before it becomes a catch phrase?)

Hmm... what do I think is going on...I think whomever "he" is, is the guy who's stalking her. (could be wrong) And I think it's someone she works with. That's all for right now haha. Omg, I laughed my ass off so hard on this chapter. It was amazing! Wonderful work! Keep up the excellent work and update soon, I'm already in withdrawl.

Faith

Btw, I updated From the Ashes if you wanna check it out.